Birthday— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Сиздин жоопторуңузда грамматикалык каталар бар жана сүйлөмдөрдүн түзүлүшү табигый эмес. Мисалы, "I hang out" ордуна "I hung out" колдонуу керек, анткени сиз өткөн убакыт жөнүндө айтып жатасыз. Ошондой эле, жоопторуңузду кыска жана так кылып, ар бир сүйлөмдө бир гана маанини билдирүү керек. Мисалы, "I usually celebrate my birthday by hanging out with my friends and eating at a cafe. Last summer, I received some presents and enjoyed spending time with my colleagues."

예시: I usually celebrate my birthday by hanging out with my friends and eating at a cafe. Last summer, I received some presents and enjoyed spending time with my colleagues.

제안: Жоопторуңузда грамматикалык каталар жана сөздөрдүн туура эмес колдонулушу бар. Мисалы, "I did some cakes" ордуна "I baked cakes" колдонуу керек. Ошондой эле, сүйлөмдөрдү логикалык жактан байланыштырган сөздөрдү колдонуу маанилүү. Мисалы, "After that" жакшы, бирок ал сүйлөмдөрдү так жана табигый кылуу үчүн кайра түзүү керек.

예시: When I was a child, I baked cakes with my mom and shared them with my friends. After that, we hung out around the town, which was very interesting and exciting for me.

제안: Жоопторуңуз кайталанып жатат жана грамматикалык каталар бар. Мисалы, "in my birthday" ордуна "on my birthday" колдонуу керек. Жоопту кыска жана так кылып, бир жолу маанини билдирүү жетиштүү. Мисалы, "Yes, I think celebrating my birthday is important because I enjoy spending time with my friends."

예시: Yes, I think celebrating my birthday is important because I enjoy spending time with my friends.

제안: Жоопто сүйлөмдөрдүн түзүлүшү жана сөздөрдүн туура колдонулушу жетишсиз. Мисалы, "whose birthday most important" ордуна "whose birthday is the most important" деп айтуу керек. Ошондой эле, жоопту тактап, логикалык байланыштарды колдонуу маанилүү. Мисалы, "In my opinion, celebrating the birthdays of elderly people is very important in Chinese culture because it shows respect."

예시: In my opinion, celebrating the birthdays of elderly people is very important in Chinese culture because it shows respect and appreciation for their wisdom.

× Last summer I hang out with my friends, colleagues and sitting on a cafe eating in another foods.

✓ Last summer I hung out with my friends and colleagues, sitting in a cafe and eating different foods.

The sentence mixes present tense 'hang out' with a past time reference 'Last summer'. The verb should be in past tense 'hung out' to match the time frame. Also, 'sitting on a cafe' is incorrect preposition usage; it should be 'sitting in a cafe'. 'Eating in another foods' is incorrect; it should be 'eating different foods'.

× Also there give me some presents for my birthday and in my birthday I usually hang out with my friends here.

✓ Also, they gave me some presents for my birthday, and on my birthday I usually hang out with my friends here.

The phrase 'there give me some presents' is incorrect; it should be 'they gave me some presents' to indicate the subject performing the action. Also, 'in my birthday' should be 'on my birthday' as the correct preposition for days. The verb 'hang out' should be in present tense here as it refers to a habitual action.

× In my childhood I did some cakes with my mom and also this cake I eating with my friends and after that I hung out around the town and it was so interesting, fascinating for child me.

✓ In my childhood, I made some cakes with my mom, and also I ate this cake with my friends. After that, I hung out around the town, and it was so interesting and fascinating for me as a child.

'Did some cakes' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'made some cakes'. 'This cake I eating' is incorrect; it should be 'I ate this cake' to use past tense. The phrase 'fascinating for child me' is awkward; it should be 'fascinating for me as a child'.

× For me, yes, because in my birthday I love spending time with my friends. For me is. Interesting, and I love spending time with my friends, especially in my birthday.

✓ For me, yes, because on my birthday I love spending time with my friends. For me, it is interesting, and I especially love spending time with my friends on my birthday.

The sentence 'For me is. Interesting' is fragmented and lacks a subject. It should be 'For me, it is interesting'. Also, 'in my birthday' should be 'on my birthday' as the correct preposition for days.

× To be honest, I don't know whose birthday most important in China, but in my opinion it's important, umm, old people's birthday because it's all people and is more important for China's culture.

✓ To be honest, I don't know whose birthday is the most important in China, but in my opinion, old people's birthdays are important because they involve all people and are more important in Chinese culture.

The sentence lacks the verb 'is' after 'birthday'. 'Old people's birthday' should be plural 'birthdays' to refer generally. 'It's all people' is unclear; rephrased to 'they involve all people'. Also, 'for China's culture' should be 'in Chinese culture' for correct preposition and adjective use.