Birthday— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Jawaban Anda sudah cukup baik, tetapi Anda bisa membuatnya lebih alami dan efektif dengan menghindari pengulangan dan menambahkan detail yang lebih spesifik. Gunakan kata penghubung untuk membuat jawaban lebih koheren dan logis.

예시: On my birthday, I usually celebrate with my closest family, including my wife, brothers, and father. We often have a special dinner together, which makes the day memorable and enjoyable.

제안: Jawaban Anda sudah jelas, tetapi Anda bisa membuatnya lebih alami dan efektif dengan menghindari kalimat negatif yang terlalu singkat dan menambahkan detail yang lebih spesifik serta menggunakan kata penghubung untuk kelancaran jawaban.

예시: When I was young, my family was not very wealthy, so we had simple birthday celebrations. Usually, my mom would buy my favorite food, and that was enough to make me happy.

제안: Jawaban Anda kurang jelas dan agak membingungkan. Cobalah untuk membuat kalimat yang lebih terstruktur dan alami dengan menjelaskan alasan secara spesifik dan menggunakan kata penghubung untuk memperjelas pendapat Anda.

예시: I don't think celebrating my birthday is very important now because as I get older, I feel a bit sad about aging. Therefore, I prefer to keep the day low-key.

제안: Jawaban Anda kurang tepat dan kurang spesifik. Sebaiknya hindari memberikan jawaban yang tidak pasti dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih alami serta jelas. Jika tidak tahu, Anda bisa menyatakan ketidaktahuan dengan cara yang lebih sopan dan menambahkan pendapat yang relevan.

예시: I'm not very sure about this, but I think important national figures like the president might have their birthdays celebrated in China. However, traditional festivals are probably more significant to most people.

× On my birthday, I try to celebrate it with my closest family, my wife and my brothers.

✓ On my birthday, I try to celebrate it with my closest family: my wife and my brothers.

The original sentence is mostly correct, but adding a colon improves clarity when listing family members. No singular/plural error here, so this is a minor stylistic suggestion.

× Also my father and I usually make a celebration like a dinner.

✓ Also, my father and I usually have a celebration like a dinner.

The sentence lacks a comma after 'Also' and 'make a celebration' is unnatural; 'have a celebration' is more appropriate. The conjunction 'Also' should be followed by a comma to separate it from the main clause.

× My mom usually will buy me my favorite food and that's all.

✓ My mom usually buys me my favorite food and that's all.

Using 'usually will' is redundant. 'Usually' already indicates frequency, so the simple present tense 'buys' is more appropriate for habitual actions.

× For now it is not that important because I'm old enough now and with my age to more older age it's becoming sad for me.

✓ For now, it is not that important because I'm old enough now, and as I get older, it's becoming sad for me.

The phrase 'with my age to more older age' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'as I get older' or 'with age'. Also, commas are needed for clarity.

× Their president.

✓ The president.

'Their president' is incorrect because 'their' refers to people, but the subject is a singular noun 'president'. The correct article is 'The' to specify the president of China.

× I do not know the answer exactly because I'm not Chinese people, but the president is the most popular people in China.

✓ I do not know the answer exactly because I'm not Chinese, but the president is the most popular person in China.

'I'm not Chinese people' is incorrect because 'people' is plural and 'I' is singular. Also, 'the most popular people' should be 'the most popular person' since it refers to one individual.