Birthday— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp cũng như từ vựng không phù hợp (ví dụ: 'Singapore' có thể là lỗi đánh máy hoặc dùng sai từ). Bạn nên trả lời ngắn gọn, rõ ràng, tránh lỗi và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp hơn.

예시: On my birthday, I usually have a small party at home with my family and close friends. We enjoy delicious food and spend quality time together, which makes the day very special.

제안: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp, đặc biệt là thì động từ và số nhiều/số ít (ví dụ: 'make' nên là 'made', 'friend' nên là 'friends'). Ngoài ra, câu cuối chưa hoàn chỉnh và thiếu liên kết logic. Hãy sử dụng các từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

예시: When I was young, my parents always brought a special birthday cake to my classroom. I shared it with my friends, and we all sang the birthday song together, which made me feel very happy and excited. It was a memorable moment because I enjoyed celebrating with them.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu không rõ ràng, khiến ý nghĩa khó hiểu. Bạn nên luyện tập cách xây dựng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp cơ bản. Hãy sử dụng các từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

예시: I think celebrating my birthday is very important because it gives me a chance to share memorable moments with my family and close friends. It helps me feel loved and appreciated.

제안: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp và từ vựng chính xác hơn (ví dụ: 'make' nên là 'makes', 'miles milestone' không đúng, nên dùng 'milestone', 'squeeze' sai nghĩa, nên dùng 'wish' hoặc 'bless'). Hãy sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và câu hoàn chỉnh để ý nghĩa rõ ràng hơn.

예시: In China, the first birthday is the most important to celebrate because it marks a significant milestone in a person's life. Many families organize big parties to honor their youngest child and wish them health and happiness. This tradition is very meaningful.

× On my birthday, I usually hold a small birthday party at home because I want to create a memorable moment with family members and close friends who I love, and we often enjoy delicious food and Singapore together.

✓ On my birthday, I usually hold a small birthday party at home because I want to create memorable moments with family members and close friends whom I love, and we often enjoy delicious food and sing together.

The verb 'singapore' is incorrect; the intended verb is 'sing'. Also, 'who' should be 'whom' as it is the object of the verb 'love'. 'Moment' should be plural 'moments' to match the context.

× When I was young, my parents always bought a special birthday cake and brought it to my classroom. I would share the cake with my friend and we would all sing this birthday song together, which make me feel very happy as excited.

✓ When I was young, my parents always bought a special birthday cake and brought it to my classroom. I would share the cake with my friends and we would all sing this birthday song together, which made me feel very happy and excited.

The noun 'friend' should be plural 'friends' to match the context. The verb 'make' should be past tense 'made' to agree with the past tense context. The phrase 'as excited' is incorrect; it should be 'and excited' to properly connect the feelings.

× It was a memorable moment because I enjoy celebrating with.

✓ It was a memorable moment because I enjoyed celebrating with them.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks an object after 'with'. Also, the verb 'enjoy' should be in past tense 'enjoyed' to match the past context.

× I really thinks UH celebrates my birthdays is plays an important role in my life because it is a change to a share memorable moment with my UH family members and close friend who I love.

✓ I really think celebrating my birthdays plays an important role in my life because it is a chance to share memorable moments with my family members and close friends whom I love.

The verb 'thinks' should be 'think' to agree with the first person subject 'I'. 'Is plays' is incorrect; it should be 'plays'. 'Change' should be 'chance'. 'A share' should be 'share'. 'Friend' should be plural 'friends'. 'Who' should be 'whom' as object of 'love'.

× Yes, and it is very.

✓ Yes, and it is very important.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks an adjective to complete the meaning.

× I think the most important birthday to celebrate in China is the 1st birthday because it make a significant miles milestone in personal lines.

✓ I think the most important birthday to celebrate in China is the 1st birthday because it makes a significant milestone in personal life.

The verb 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. 'Miles milestone' is incorrect; it should be 'milestone'. 'Personal lines' should be 'personal life'.

× Many families organize a big party to honor their youngest child and squeeze them with health and happiness.

✓ Many families organize a big party to honor their youngest child and wish them health and happiness.

The verb 'squeeze' is incorrect in this context; the correct verb is 'wish'. 'Wish someone with health and happiness' is the correct phrase.

× This traditional is very meaningful.

✓ This tradition is very meaningful.

The word 'traditional' is an adjective; the correct noun form here is 'tradition'.