Birthday— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct first, then add concise, specific details using linking words. Correct grammar (tenses, articles) and avoid repetition. Keep to a maximum of 4–5 sentences. For example, say you don’t celebrate, then describe how friends call and you sometimes have a dinner, giving the name or type of restaurant and frequency.

예시: I usually don’t celebrate my birthday. Instead, friends often call to wish me, and sometimes my girlfriend and I go out for dinner at a nice restaurant. Generally we try a new place every year or return to a favourite local bistro. It’s a low-key occasion that feels like any other day.

제안: Begin with a clear topic sentence about past routine, use past simple/past continuous consistently, and add linking words to organise details. Be specific about age ranges, typical activities, and include one example. Keep sentences concise and natural.

예시: When I was young, I usually spent my birthdays at water polo training because I played the sport from childhood. Often I had training camps or matches around that time, so there was no time for a big celebration. Occasionally my teammates and I would have a simple dinner together after training.

제안: Answer directly and give clear reasons with supporting detail and linking words. Use natural phrasing (e.g. ‘popular cultural practice’), avoid contradictory phrases and repetition. Limit to 3–4 sentences and include a brief consequence or example.

예시: No, I don’t think it is important for me to celebrate birthdays because I view them as a popular cultural practice rather than a personal necessity. For that reason I usually treat my birthday like any other day and don’t organise special events. I prefer to spend time quietly or with close friends if something comes up.

제안: Avoid saying you don’t know; instead, offer a reasonable, culturally sensitive opinion. Use linking words and give specific reasons or examples (e.g. family importance, traditional festivals). Watch for inaccuracies and vague generalisations. Keep answers respectful and concise.

예시: I’m not an expert on Chinese customs, but if I had to choose I would say family birthdays — especially a mother’s — are often important, because respect for parents is central to many Asian cultures. Public figures’ birthdays are less commonly celebrated by ordinary people than family milestones are.

× I don't celebrate my birthday. Usually I have calls from my friends to celebrate my birthday and we have dinner with my girlfriend generally in good restaurant.

✓ I don't celebrate my birthday. Usually I receive calls from my friends to celebrate my birthday, and we have dinner with my girlfriend, generally in a good restaurant.

Use 'receive' instead of 'have' for receiving calls (verb choice). Add commas for clarity and use the preposition 'in' with 'restaurant' plus the indefinite article 'a': 'in a good restaurant'. Also place 'generally' before the phrase it modifies for clearer word order.

× I'm water polo player and I have been playing water polo since childhood.

✓ I'm a water polo player and I have been playing water polo since childhood.

A countable noun 'water polo player' requires the indefinite article 'a'. Adding 'a' corrects the noun phrase; the present perfect continuous 'have been playing' is appropriate to show an action from the past continuing to the present.

× So generally my birthday I had a camps or trainings so there was no time to for celebrate something generally being teammates and have a dinner that's it.

✓ So generally on my birthday I had camps or training, so there was no time to celebrate anything; we would just be with teammates and have dinner. That's it.

Use the preposition 'on' for days ('on my birthday'). 'Camps' can be uncountable or singular 'camp'; 'training' is uncountable. Remove the extra preposition 'to' before 'celebrate'. Use 'celebrate anything' rather than 'something' in negative context. Rephrase 'being teammates' to 'be with teammates' for clarity. Use past tense consistently and simple constructions for spoken clarity.

× No, it's not important for me because celebrating birthday is very popular culture thing.

✓ No, it's not important to me because celebrating birthdays is a very popular cultural thing.

Use 'to me' rather than 'for me' for opinions. Use plural 'birthdays' when speaking generally. Add the indefinite article 'a' before 'very popular cultural thing' and use the adjective 'cultural' instead of 'culture' to modify 'thing'.

× By contrast, I am very opposite of that.

✓ By contrast, I am very much the opposite of that.

'Opposite' needs the structure 'be the opposite of' and often is modified by 'very much' for emphasis. The original omitted 'the' and used incorrect adverb placement.

× I don't do different in my birthdays than any other day, so no.

✓ I don't do anything different on my birthdays compared with any other day, so no.

Use 'do anything different' rather than 'do different'. Use the preposition 'on' with 'birthdays'. Use 'compared with' or 'than' correctly; here 'compared with' is clearer. Also use plural 'birthdays' for general statements.

× I have no clue about that because I don't know too much things about China.

✓ I have no clue about that because I don't know too many things about China.

Use 'too many' with countable nouns ('things'). Alternatively, 'I don't know much about China' would be more natural. 'About' is correct preposition here.

× But if I have to guess, maybe it can be some political president of China or you know, Asian people is very spiritual.

✓ But if I have to guess, maybe it would be some political leader of China, or, you know, Asian people are very spiritual.

Use 'would' or 'might' for hypothetical guesses rather than 'can'. Use 'leader' rather than 'president' for uncertain reference. Subject-verb agreement: 'Asian people are' (plural) not 'is'. Also add commas for spoken hesitation.

× Maybe it can be mom's birthday.

✓ Maybe it could be a mother's birthday.

Use 'could' for speculative possibility. Use 'a mother's birthday' or 'one's mother's birthday' to generalise; 'mom's birthday' without context is informal and unclear. Alternatively: 'Maybe a mother's birthday.'