Birthday— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., "I usually spend my birthday outdoors.") then give one or two specific details with linking words. Correct common grammar errors ("on my birthday," "for a day"/"for a couple of days," "spending time with"). Keep it within 3–4 sentences and avoid filler phrases like "OK, thank you for the question."

예시: I usually spend my birthday outdoors. For example, I often go on a day trip with friends or family, which helps me relax and feel refreshed. I also like to have a simple meal together and take photos to remember the day.

제안: Answer directly with a past-tense topic sentence (e.g., "When I was young, I celebrated with friends and family."). Use past tense consistently and give specific examples (games played, favourite cake, typical venue). Avoid hesitation words and repeated phrases. Limit to 2–4 clear sentences and use linking words like "usually" or "often."

예시: When I was young, I usually celebrated my birthday with friends and family. We often went to a playground, sang songs, and shared a chocolate cake. I especially remember taking many photos with my classmates and playing party games.

제안: Give a clear opinion with supporting reasons. Use consistent subject references ("I" or "people") and avoid contradictory statements. For example, say whether you personally find it important and then explain why using linking words ("however," "because"). Use correct phrases: "helps people relax" and "celebrate another year of life."

예시: Personally, I don't think celebrating my birthday is essential. However, I believe it can be important because it helps people relax and appreciate another year of life. For that reason, I sometimes mark the day quietly with close family.

제안: If you don't know an answer, say so briefly and then offer a related, relevant comment about general practice. Start with "I don't know much about birthdays in China," then give a plausible general answer (e.g., elders' birthdays are often important) with a reason. Keep language simple and avoid listing unclear names that confuse the listener.

예시: I don't know much about birthday customs in China. From what I have heard, birthdays of elders and grandparents are often celebrated because families respect older generations. In general, important birthdays may include ones with special ages, like 60, because of cultural traditions.

× In my birthday I usually prefer to go outside for a day long or for a couple of day and I think it makes me fresh and gets me the time for passing with my friends and family.

✓ On my birthday I usually prefer to go out for a whole day or for a couple of days, and I think it refreshes me and gives me time to spend with my friends and family.

Use 'On my birthday' (correct preposition for days), 'go out' is the natural phrasal verb, 'a whole day' or 'a day long' -> 'for a whole day'; plural 'days' needed after 'couple of'; 'refreshes me' is a correct verb form and subject-verb agreement; 'gives me time to spend' replaces 'gets me the time for passing' which used incorrect verb and preposition. Grammar problem type ID:11

× OK, it was very nice that I can.

✓ OK, it was very nice.

The original mixes present ability 'can' with past 'it was'. Remove 'that I can' to maintain past tense and a natural response. If intending to express ability in the past, use 'I could' and a complete clause (e.g. 'it was very nice that I could go'). Grammar problem type ID:5

× I was celebrated my birthday, uh, by inviting my friends or going for a playground or taking a a Batty cake and some snaps with my friends and family.

✓ I celebrated my birthday by inviting my friends, going to a playground, and having a birthday cake and some photos with my friends and family.

Use active verb 'I celebrated' (remove passive 'was celebrated'). 'Going to a playground' uses correct preposition; 'birthday' spelled correctly; 'photos' is preferred over 'snaps' in formal speech. Pronoun issues: 'my' used correctly but sentence structure and verb choice were incorrect. Grammar problem type ID:12

× I would like to celebrate my birthday with my, uh, friends and family when I was young.

✓ I liked to celebrate my birthday with my friends and family when I was young.

The sentence mixes conditional 'would like' with past time 'when I was young'. Use past tense 'liked' or 'used to celebrate' to match the past context. 'When I was young' requires past tense consistency. Grammar problem type ID:6

× No, I don't think that, but I think everyone should celebrate their birthday for his own.

✓ No, I don't think so, but I think everyone should celebrate their own birthday.

Use 'so' after 'I don't think' for natural response. 'Their' and 'his' were mixed; use 'their' (singular they) or 'his or her' consistently. 'For his own' is ungrammatical here; 'their own birthday' is correct. Grammar problem type ID:12

× It makes ones relax and one makes me fresh in mind that he can celebrate his year of life.

✓ It helps one relax and makes me feel refreshed, marking another year of life.

Original mixes 'one' and 'me' and 'he' incorrectly. Choose consistent pronouns. 'Helps one relax' is a correct general statement; 'makes me feel refreshed' expresses personal effect. 'Marking another year of life' is a clearer way to express celebration of a year. Grammar problem type ID:12

× OK. I have no any knowledge about that and that whose birthday should be so important in China, but in my country I can say that it was or Begum, Kalita, Jiya etcetera.

✓ OK. I don't have any knowledge about whose birthdays are most important in China, but in my country I can say that people like Begum, Kalita, and Jiya are celebrated.

'I have no any knowledge' is incorrect; use 'I don't have any knowledge' or 'I have no knowledge'. 'That whose birthday should be so important' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'whose birthdays are most important'. In the second clause, correct tense and verb choice: 'people like X are celebrated' or 'I can say that Begum, Kalita, and Jiya are important figures.' Also add commas and 'and' before the last item in a list. Grammar problem type ID:26