Birthday— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and clear: start with a direct topic sentence, expand with one or two specific details using linking words, and correct small grammar errors. Avoid repetition. For example, say when you sleep in, why you choose that, and whether anything ever changes.

예시: I usually sleep in on my birthday because I prefer a quiet day. For example, last year I stayed home and read a book, and I didn’t plan any celebration with friends or family.

제안: Use past tense consistently and give a brief specific detail to enrich the answer. Use linking words like 'so' or 'therefore' to connect ideas and avoid disfluencies (e.g., 'MMM').

예시: When I was young, I usually did nothing special on my birthday because my family didn’t celebrate. So it was just a normal day of school and homework, nothing different from other days.

제안: Begin with a clear topic sentence and add one reason with a linking word. Use correct articles and adjective forms ('an ordinary day'), and provide a specific example to support your opinion.

예시: No, I don’t think it’s important for me to celebrate my birthday because my family treats it as a normal day. For instance, we usually have the same routine and don’t prepare a special meal or gifts.

제안: Be specific and grammatically correct: use possessive forms and plural where needed, and explain why with a clear supporting detail using linking words like 'because' or 'for example'.

예시: I think parents’ birthdays, especially my father’s, are the most important to celebrate because they raised me and deserve our gratitude. For example, we usually call our parents and sometimes prepare a small dinner to show appreciation.

× I usually sleep over my birthday.

✓ I usually sleep through my birthday.

The phrase 'sleep over my birthday' is incorrect; 'sleep over' usually means stay overnight at someone else's place. The intended meaning is to sleep during the birthday, so use the preposition 'through' with 'sleep' to indicate continuing sleep during the event. This fixes the preposition use and meaning. Suggestion: use 'sleep through' when you mean to be asleep during an event.

× I have never celebrated my birthday.

✓ I have never celebrated my birthday.

This sentence is grammatically correct as written and matches present perfect usage for life experiences. No change needed.

× Not even with my parents or my friends.

✓ Not even with my parents or friends.

The original fragment is understandable but informal. Removing the redundant 'my' before 'friends' makes the phrase more natural and concise. Also, joining with the previous sentence is optional: 'I have never celebrated my birthday, not even with my parents or friends.'

× When I was young, I usually do nothing on my birthday.

✓ When I was young, I usually did nothing on my birthday.

The time frame 'When I was young' refers to the past, so the habitual action should use past tense 'did' not present 'do'. Use 'used to' or 'would' for habitual past actions as alternatives: 'I usually did nothing' or 'I used to do nothing.'

× We didn't celebrate.

✓ We didn't celebrate.

This sentence is grammatically correct as a short past-tense response. It fits the past context and needs no change.

× It MMM just a normal day I think.

✓ It was just a normal day, I think.

'MMM' appears to be a hesitation filler and should be removed in written form. Use past tense 'was' to match 'When I was young' and add a comma before 'I think' to separate the clause. Suggestion: 'It was just a normal day, I think.'

× No, I don't think so.

✓ No, I don't think so.

This sentence is grammatically correct and appropriate as a response. No change needed.

× I think my birthday is just a ordinary day, just like Sunday or Monday.

✓ I think my birthday is just an ordinary day, like a Sunday or Monday.

The article before a vowel sound should be 'an' not 'a' ('ordinary' begins with a vowel sound). Also 'just' is acceptable but redundant twice; streamline to 'just an ordinary day' or 'an ordinary day.' Reordering to 'like a Sunday or Monday' sounds more natural.

× It is not special for me and my family.

✓ It is not special to me or my family.

Use the preposition 'to' after 'special' to indicate who finds it special: 'special to me.' Also use 'or' rather than 'and' to convey that neither party finds it special. This corrects preposition and conjunction choice.

× I think my parents birthdays, especially my father's are the most important birthdays to celebrate because they are special for me.

✓ I think my parents' birthdays, especially my father's, are the most important birthdays to celebrate because they are special to me.

Possessive plural 'parents' requires an apostrophe after the plural: 'parents''. In written form that becomes 'parents''. More correctly 'parents'' becomes 'parents'' with apostrophe after s; in plain text use 'parents' birthdays'. Also insert commas to set off the clause 'especially my father's'. Use 'are' to agree with plural subject 'birthdays' (already present). Finally change the preposition to 'special to me' rather than 'special for me.' Suggested corrected sentence as provided. Note: Ensure apostrophe placement: 'parents' birthdays' indicates birthdays belonging to both parents.