Relax— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer needs to be clearer and more natural. Avoid unclear phrases like "take issue along the street" and "stay in a very sin zone." Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using linking words to improve coherence.

예시: Recently, I usually go to the park to relax because the fresh air helps clear my mind. Sometimes, I take walks along the streets in my neighborhood, which allows me to enjoy the quiet surroundings. Relaxing outdoors has helped me reduce stress and feel more peaceful. I have also encouraged some friends to join me, and we often relax together.

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to start with a clear topic sentence, then use linking words to add specific details. Avoid confusing phrases like "hike mountains on Android." Make your sentences concise and natural.

예시: I usually relax alone because I enjoy some quiet time. However, sometimes I go out with my younger sister. We visit parks, go swimming, and hike mountains together. These activities help us bond and enjoy beautiful scenery.

제안: Your answer lacks clarity and contains repetitive and unclear phrases. Use a clear topic sentence and provide specific examples with linking words. Avoid repeating words unnecessarily and ensure your sentences are grammatically correct.

예시: Yes, I think listening to music is very relaxing. I enjoy Nigerian Afrobeat and pop music because their rhythms are lively and uplifting. This kind of music helps me focus and reduces my stress naturally.

제안: Your answer is confusing and contains unclear phrases like "activity sister I incorporate into my D." Use a clear topic sentence and link your ideas logically. Provide specific activities and explain why they help you relax, keeping sentences concise and natural.

예시: To relax, I do several activities. I exercise regularly, hike in the mountains, and take walks in the woods. I also enjoy listening to calming music. My younger sister often joins me, which makes me feel safe and comfortable.

× sometimes I also take issue along the street in my area to relax

✓ sometimes I also take a walk along the street in my area to relax

The phrase 'take issue' is incorrect here; the correct expression is 'take a walk' when referring to walking for relaxation. Using the correct verb + -ing form or phrase improves clarity.

× It comes my mind and also helps me stay in a very sin zone

✓ It comes to my mind and also helps me stay in a very calm zone

The sentence is missing the preposition 'to' after 'comes' and 'sin zone' is likely a typo for 'calm zone'. Correct sentence structure and word choice are necessary for clarity.

× I've also introduced it to a couple of friends stuff equally adapted and started this journey with me

✓ I've also introduced it to a couple of friends who equally adapted and started this journey with me

The pronoun 'stuff' is incorrect here; 'who' should be used to refer to people. Proper pronoun usage is essential for grammatical correctness.

× I must have my relaxation times, I spent it alone

✓ I must have my relaxation times; I spend them alone

The verb tense should be present to match the habitual action. 'Spent' is past tense, but the context requires present tense 'spend'. Also, 'it' should be 'them' to agree with plural 'times'.

× where visit parks and also go swimming, hike mountains on Android and enjoy picturesque landscapes together

✓ where we visit parks and also go swimming, hike mountains, and enjoy picturesque landscapes together

The sentence is missing the subject 'we' before 'visit', and 'on Android' is unclear and likely incorrect. Proper preposition and subject usage improve sentence clarity.

× I enjoy he pops

✓ I enjoy hip hop

The phrase 'he pops' is incorrect and likely a mishearing or typo of 'hip hop'. Correct word choice is important for meaning.

× Nigerian music does afrobeat

✓ Nigerian music includes afrobeat

The verb 'does' is incorrectly used here; 'includes' or 'features' is more appropriate to describe music genres.

× I also like listening to some music and pops

✓ I also like listening to some pop music

The phrase 'music and pops' is incorrect; 'pop music' is the correct term. Proper word order is necessary.

× This sort of music sort of like engages you

✓ This sort of music sort of engages you

The phrase 'sort of like' is redundant; 'sort of' or 'like' alone is sufficient. Correct pronoun and phrase usage improves clarity.

× Relax is the mind and naturally just helps you to become less stressed

✓ It relaxes the mind and naturally helps you to become less stressed

The sentence lacks a subject and uses 'Relax is the mind' incorrectly. The verb 'relaxes' with subject 'it' is correct here.

× So relax, I have a lot of activity sister I incorporate into my D

✓ To relax, I have a lot of activities that I incorporate into my day

The phrase 'activity sister' is incorrect; likely 'activities that' is intended. Also, 'D' should be 'day'. Correct quantifiers and word choice are needed.

× I hike in the mountains

✓ I hike in the mountains

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× I take a stroll to the woods

✓ I take a stroll in the woods

The correct preposition with 'stroll' and 'woods' is 'in' rather than 'to' to indicate location.

× I also enjoy listening to music that are very calming and so forth

✓ I also enjoy listening to music that is very calming and so forth

The relative pronoun 'that' refers to 'music' which is singular, so the verb should be 'is' not 'are'.

× this sort of activities are equally shared by my younger sister

✓ these sorts of activities are equally shared by my younger sister

'This sort of activities' is incorrect; 'these sorts of activities' agrees in number with plural 'activities'.

× which also helps me to feel safe and sound

✓ which also helps me feel safe and sound

The infinitive 'to feel' is acceptable but often omitted after 'helps'; both forms are correct, so this is optional.