Relax— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy such as repeating the idea of relaxation multiple times. Also, improve sentence structure and use linking words to make your response more coherent.

예시: Recently, I like to relax by taking walks in a nearby public park. Being surrounded by nature helps me feel calm and refreshed.

제안: Your answer is relevant and clear but could be improved by using linking words to connect ideas smoothly and by avoiding repetitive phrases like 'very relaxing feeling.' Also, try to vary your vocabulary.

예시: I usually relax with my friends; however, when they are busy, I prefer to meditate alone because it helps me feel peaceful and relaxed.

제안: Your answer is good but could be improved by correcting minor grammar errors (e.g., 'effects' should be 'affects') and by using more precise vocabulary. Also, try to combine sentences for better flow.

예시: Yes, definitely. Music directly affects my mood, and whenever I feel stressed or anxious, I listen to calm classical music, which helps me relax.

제안: Your answer is clear but could be more concise and natural. Avoid repeating the same idea about nature being relaxing. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: To relax, I usually take strolls in the park because being in nature calms me. If I don't have time, I listen to classical or folk music to unwind.

× Well, I go to a park and just walk by.

✓ Well, I go to a park and just walk around.

The phrase 'walk by' is incorrect in this context. The correct expression is 'walk around' when referring to strolling within a park. This is a common collocation error rather than a strict singular/plural issue, but it fits best under this category as it involves the use of prepositional phrases related to movement.

× I went to a nearby public park to my house to relax last week.

✓ I went to a nearby public park near my house to relax last week.

The preposition 'to' is incorrectly used before 'my house'. The correct preposition to indicate proximity is 'near'. So, 'near my house' correctly expresses the location of the park relative to the house.

× Music directly effects my mood and whenever I am in a bit of stress or anxiety, I like to listen to classical and calm music which gives me a sense of relaxation.

✓ Music directly affects my mood and whenever I am a bit stressed or anxious, I like to listen to classical and calm music which gives me a sense of relaxation.

The word 'effects' is a noun; the correct verb form here is 'affects'. Also, the phrase 'in a bit of stress or anxiety' is awkward; the correct expression is 'a bit stressed or anxious'. These corrections improve clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× And sometimes when I don't have a time to go to the park, I like to listen to classical and folk music to relax.

✓ And sometimes when I don't have time to go to the park, I like to listen to classical and folk music to relax.

The phrase 'a time' is incorrect here because 'time' is an uncountable noun in this context and does not require an article. Removing 'a' makes the sentence grammatically correct.