Relax— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more natural and grammatically correct. Use a clear topic sentence and avoid redundancy. For example, mention the place you visited first, then describe it with specific details using linking words to connect ideas logically.

예시: Recently, I went to Samsung Beach with my family during the summer break. It has breathtaking views and offers many delicious foods, which made our visit very enjoyable and relaxing.

제안: Focus on answering the question directly with a clear topic sentence. Use correct grammar and linking words to connect your ideas. Avoid repeating similar information and provide specific reasons or examples.

예시: I usually relax with my family because their company makes me feel comfortable and at ease. For instance, during the summer break, we visited Sunshine Beach together to enjoy the stunning views and delicious food.

제안: Improve your answer by using more natural expressions and correct grammar. Provide a clear topic sentence and explain why music helps you relax with specific examples, using linking words for coherence.

예시: Yes, I believe listening to music is very relaxing. For example, when I feel stressed, I like to listen to my favourite song, "Callaway Enchanted," which helps me calm down and feel more peaceful.

제안: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and use correct grammar. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific details about your relaxing activities.

예시: To relax, I often go shopping with my mother. For example, on weekends, we usually visit Changdian Plaza to buy things we need and some food for our family, which I find enjoyable and refreshing.

× Of course, recently on my summer break, my family went to a lot of beautiful place especially Samsung beach.

✓ Of course, recently on my summer break, my family went to a lot of beautiful places especially Samsung beach.

The noun 'place' should be plural 'places' because it refers to multiple locations. Using the singular form here is incorrect when talking about more than one place.

× In here is have a lot of breathtaking views and many delicious foods that make me unwise and more comfortable.

✓ Here there are a lot of breathtaking views and many delicious foods that make me relaxed and more comfortable.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'is have' which is ungrammatical. The correct structure is 'there are' to indicate existence of plural nouns. Also, 'in here' is better as 'here'. 'Unwise' is incorrect in this context; 'relaxed' fits better.

× I feels very relax and my family is make me more comfortable.

✓ I feel very relaxed and my family makes me more comfortable.

The verb 'feel' should be in base form 'feel' after 'I' (first person singular). 'Feels' is third person singular. Also, 'is make' is incorrect; it should be 'makes' to agree with singular subject 'my family'. 'Relax' should be 'relaxed' as an adjective.

× my family went to Sunshine Beach to see a stunning view and delicious food.

✓ my family went to Sunshine Beach to see stunning views and delicious food.

'View' should be plural 'views' because it is more natural to refer to multiple views at a beach. 'Delicious food' is correct as uncountable noun.

× This is Have Me Relax.

✓ This helps me relax.

The original sentence is ungrammatical. To express that the song causes relaxation, use 'helps me relax'. 'Have me relax' is incorrect here.

× I have numerous activity to relax, especially go shopping with my mother.

✓ I have numerous activities to relax, especially going shopping with my mother.

'Activity' should be plural 'activities' because 'numerous' refers to more than one. Also, 'go shopping' should be 'going shopping' to fit the sentence structure.

× On the weekend, I and my mother often go to Changdian Plaza to buy some things we want and buy some food for my family.

✓ On the weekend, my mother and I often go to Changdian Plaza to buy some things we want and some food for my family.

The correct order of pronouns is 'my mother and I' not 'I and my mother'. Also, repeating 'buy' is unnecessary; it can be omitted for smoother flow.