Relax— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clear, correct grammar and give a concise topic sentence followed by one or two specific details. Use correct phrases (e.g. "away from the hustle and bustle of the city") and avoid invented words. Keep it to 1–2 sentences.

예시: I went to the Gold Coast last month to get away from the hustle and bustle of the city. It was a quiet beach town where I could walk along the shore and sleep early.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence, correct the prepositions and sentence structure, and add a specific routine detail. Use linking words like "and" or "so" to connect ideas naturally.

예시: I usually relax with my partner, and we often go out together for a few hours. For example, we drive to a nearby park and sit by the lake for about four to five hours.

제안: Give a direct answer then add a specific reason or example. Correct grammar ("in stress" → "stressed"); split long sentences for clarity and use linking words like "because" or "for example."

예시: Definitely. I find music relaxing because it helps me focus and calm down when I'm stressed. For example, I often play soft instrumental music while I work to reduce anxiety.

제안: Use a clear topic sentence and correct collocations ("get away from the hustle and bustle of the city"). Add a specific detail and a linking word for coherence. Keep it within 1–3 sentences.

예시: I usually get away from the hustle and bustle of the city to a quiet café or park. There I sit with a cup of coffee and read or just watch people, which helps me unwind.

× I went to Gold Coast last month to aware from the Hustle and Buster City.

✓ I went to the Gold Coast last month to get away from the hustle and bustle of the city.

The original sentence has vocabulary and article errors and a verb choice issue. 'aware' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'get away from' meaning to escape. 'Gold Coast' as a place name usually takes the definite article 'the' when referring to the region. 'Hustle and Buster' is a mistaken phrase; the common expression is 'hustle and bustle.' Also include 'of the city' to clarify the noun phrase. The tense 'went ... last month' is correct for a past event.

× I usually relax with my partner and we spend about like 4-5 hours to somewhere else to relax.

✓ I usually relax with my partner, and we spend about four to five hours somewhere else relaxing.

Problems: 'about like' is redundant and informal; use 'about' or write numbers in words for speech transcripts. 'to somewhere else to relax' uses the incorrect preposition and structure. Use 'somewhere else' without 'to' and use the gerund 'relaxing' after it to show ongoing activity. Also add a comma before 'and' to join clauses.

× Definitely yes. I usually listen to music when I am in a stress, especially when I'm working, I like to turn on some music to relax.

✓ Definitely. I usually listen to music when I am stressed, especially when I'm working; I like to turn on music to relax.

Use 'stressed' (adjective) instead of 'in a stress' which is incorrect. 'Definitely yes' is awkward; 'Definitely' suffices. Avoid repeating 'some music' twice; 'turn on music' is natural. Use a semicolon or separate sentences to avoid a comma splice between the clauses.

× I like to away from the hustle and bustle city to a quiet place and I just like to sit down and rest with a cup of coffee.

✓ I like to get away from the hustle and bustle of the city and go to a quiet place, where I just sit and rest with a cup of coffee.

'to away' is incorrect; the verb phrase is 'get away from.' 'hustle and bustle city' needs 'the' and the preposition 'of' — 'the hustle and bustle of the city.' Also restructure 'to a quiet place and I just like to sit down' for natural flow: 'go to a quiet place, where I just sit and rest.' Use consistent verbs ('sit and rest') and include articles where needed.