Cakes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more natural and concise by avoiding redundancy and improving sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and provide a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details.

예시: I don't usually eat sweet foods, but I enjoy cakes on special occasions like birthdays and anniversaries because they make the celebration more enjoyable.

제안: Instead of simply stating you don't know, try to give a brief, general answer or express your interest in learning about the topic. This shows engagement and helps maintain the flow of conversation.

예시: I'm not very familiar with traditional Chinese cakes, but I know that many cultures have unique desserts, and I'd love to learn more about them.

제안: Your answer is good but can be improved by making it more concise and using linking words to connect your ideas clearly. Also, avoid repeating the same idea.

예시: I can't make cakes yet, but I want to learn how to bake because my girlfriend loves them, and I'd like to surprise her with homemade cakes someday.

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant. To improve, try to use varied vocabulary and linking words to make your response more engaging and natural.

예시: Yes, I loved cakes as a child. I always looked forward to my friends' birthdays because I could enjoy delicious cake, thanks to my sweet tooth.

제안: Improve your answer by using more precise vocabulary and linking words. Also, clarify what 'Chico' is to make your answer more informative and natural.

예시: Yes, I usually have desserts after meals, such as dates or sweet fruits like chicozapote, which I find to be a healthy and satisfying way to end my dinner.

× It is a very good sweet to eat on the occasions and it is a very preferable.

✓ It is a very good sweet to eat on the occasions and it is very preferable.

The word 'preferable' is an adjective and does not require the article 'a' before it. Using 'a very preferable' is incorrect because 'preferable' is not a noun but an adjective describing preference.

× I am not Chinese so I don't know what are the Chinese cakes and I'm not familiar with cooking as well so I would not be able to elaborate about Chinese cakes further.

✓ I am not Chinese, so I don't know what Chinese cakes are, and I'm not familiar with cooking either, so I would not be able to elaborate on Chinese cakes further.

The original sentence has incorrect word order in the embedded question 'what are the Chinese cakes' and lacks proper punctuation and conjunctions. The correct word order in indirect questions is subject + verb ('what Chinese cakes are'). Also, 'as well' is better replaced with 'either' in negative sentences, and 'elaborate about' should be 'elaborate on'.

× But if in the future I would like to learn to bake and make cakes because my girlfriend loves to eat cake and definitely I would love to bake some cake for her in the future.

✓ But in the future, I would like to learn to bake and make cakes because my girlfriend loves to eat cake, and definitely I would love to bake some cake for her then.

The phrase 'if in the future I would like' is incorrect because 'would like' already expresses a conditional or polite desire. The 'if' is unnecessary here. Also, repeating 'in the future' twice is redundant; it is better to place it once at the beginning and use 'then' later for clarity.

× I used to wait for my friend's birthday to come so that I would get some cake to eat.

✓ I used to wait for my friend's birthday to come so that I could get some cake to eat.

The modal verb 'would' is not appropriate here to express past ability or possibility. 'Could' is the correct modal verb to indicate past ability or possibility in this context.

× I had a sweet tooth as a child, so I always looked forward for the birthday.

✓ I had a sweet tooth as a child, so I always looked forward to the birthday.

The verb phrase 'look forward' is always followed by the preposition 'to', not 'for'. Using 'looked forward for' is incorrect.

× Yes, I prefer to have desserts after meal.

✓ Yes, I prefer to have desserts after meals.

The noun 'meal' should be plural 'meals' because the statement refers to desserts after any meal in general, not just one specific meal.