Cakes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh, and), correct verb forms and plural/singular agreement, and limit to 3–4 sentences. Use one or two specific reasons with linking words (for example, because, and) to make it coherent.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy sweet foods, especially cakes. I like cakes because they come in many flavors and I can choose different toppings. For example, I often prefer chocolate or fruit-topped cakes because they balance sweetness with texture.

제안: Provide a clearer, accurate example and correct vocabulary. Begin with a direct answer naming one or two traditional cakes, then give specific details or comparisons. Avoid inaccurate or confusing statements and use linking words like for example or moreover.

예시: Yes. One traditional Chinese cake is mooncake, which people eat during the Mid-Autumn Festival. For example, mooncakes often have fillings such as red bean paste or salted egg yolk, and are sometimes shared with family during celebrations.

제안: Give a concise, confident answer and add one specific detail about what you can make or how often. Replace repetition and fillers with a short supporting sentence using linking words (for example, I can make...).

예시: Yes, I can bake cakes, and I often make simple sponge cakes with different fillings. For example, I sometimes bake a vanilla sponge and fill it with whipped cream and fresh berries.

제안: Answer directly about your own childhood and avoid generalizing. Use past tense consistently and provide one specific memory or example. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like because or when.

예시: Yes, I loved cakes as a child because they were sweet and tasted very good. For example, I remember eating birthday cakes with my family every year, especially chocolate cake with candles.

제안: Clarify the idea—state whether you usually have dessert and explain why, using correct verbs and clearer reason. Remove confusing contradictions and use one or two coherent sentences with linking words such as although, because, or so.

예시: Yes, I usually have a small dessert after meals because I enjoy ending with something sweet. For instance, I often eat fruit or a small pastry because it feels like a pleasant finish to the meal.

× Uh, but the I think the common one and the most people likes cake but and also me too.

✓ But I think the most common choice is cake, and I do too.

The sentence has incorrect pronoun placement ('the I think'), wrong word order, and redundant phrases. 'Most people likes' has subject-verb agreement and pronoun issues; it should be 'most people like'. Rephrase to 'I think the most common choice is cake, and I do too' to fix pronoun placement and make the sentence natural.

× I like cakes because it has different flavors and and I can do a different toppings.

✓ I like cakes because they have different flavors and I can make different toppings.

The subject 'cakes' is plural, so the pronoun must be 'they' and the verb 'have' should be plural. 'Do a different toppings' is ungrammatical: use 'make different toppings' or 'use different toppings'.

× Yes, there is a lot of uh, different traditional uh, Chinese cakes, but the common one which is called San specialian, umm actually not only the Chinese they use to eat it also the and Middle East, they like to eat it with Nutella and some of pistachio and the toppings strawberries.

✓ Yes, there are many different traditional Chinese cakes. The common one is called San specialian. Actually, not only Chinese people eat it; people in the Middle East also like to eat it with Nutella, pistachios, and strawberries as toppings.

'There is a lot of ... cakes' is incorrect because 'cakes' is plural; use 'there are many'. Also pronoun and article errors: 'the common one which is called' is awkward—use 'The common one is called'. 'Not only the Chinese they use to eat it' has redundant pronoun 'they' and incorrect structure; use 'not only Chinese people eat it'. 'Some of pistachio' should be 'pistachios' and 'the toppings strawberries' should be 'strawberries as toppings'.

× Umm yes, I can make cakes with different flavors toppings.

✓ Yes, I can make cakes with different flavored toppings.

The original is missing a connector and has adjective form issues. Use 'different flavored toppings' or 'toppings of different flavors'. The modal 'can' is fine; adjust noun phrase to be grammatical.

× Actually I know how to do cakes and I know how to do umm, different, different and different flippers of cake.

✓ Actually I know how to make cakes and how to make different kinds of cake layers/flavors.

'Do cakes' is unnatural; use 'make cakes'. 'Flippers' is incorrect—likely meant 'layers' or 'flavors' or 'fillings'. Clarify with 'different kinds of cake layers' or 'different flavors'. Also remove repetitive 'different, different and different'.

× I think every person was loving eating cake when he was child because cake, it's, it's very delicious and I think it is sweet, so which makes that child love it.

✓ I think every person loved eating cake when they were a child because cake is very delicious and sweet, which makes children love it.

Use simple past 'loved' instead of 'was loving' for a habitual past action. Use plural or gender-neutral 'they' and 'were a child' rather than 'he was child'. Remove unnecessary commas and use 'which makes children love it' for clarity.

× So when I was a child, actually I eats cakes a lot because it tastes so good.

✓ So when I was a child, I actually ate cakes a lot because they tasted so good.

For past habitual action use past tense 'ate' not 'eats'. 'Cakes' is plural, so use 'they tasted' not 'it tastes'.

× Yes, actually I must to take or eat or buy some dessert because when I start eating salt I want a dessert and then when I eat dessert I need salt.

✓ Yes, actually I must take or buy some dessert because when I start eating savory food I want a dessert, and when I eat dessert I need something salty.

'Must to' is incorrect; use 'must' or 'have to' without 'to'. 'Eating salt' is unnatural; use 'eating savory food' or 'something salty'. Clarify reciprocal desire: after dessert you want something salty. Remove redundant 'or eat or'.

× So yes, actually I eat or I like to eat this one I want.

✓ So yes, actually I like to eat desserts when I want them.

The original sentence is unclear and repetitive. Simplify to 'I like to eat desserts when I want them' or 'I eat dessert when I want it' to make meaning clear and grammatically correct.