Cakes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one brief supporting detail. Avoid run-on sentences and tense errors. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'so'.

예시: Yes, I love sweet foods. For example, last week I brought a New York cheesecake and some donuts to my girlfriend's house, so we enjoyed them together and had a great time.

제안: Improve clarity, pronunciation and grammar. Give a clear topic sentence naming the cake (nian gao), then describe features with specific details using linking words. Avoid hesitations and incorrect verb forms.

예시: Yes. One traditional Chinese cake is nian gao, which we eat during Chinese New Year. It is usually reddish, very sticky and sweet, and we often add egg to change the texture so it is less sticky.

제안: Answer directly then expand briefly with coherent linking words. Correct small grammatical mistakes and reduce hesitations. Use two sentences maximum and avoid repeating fillers.

예시: No, I can't make cakes. However, last year my girlfriend baked a birthday cake for me; it was slightly burnt but very tasty, and I was really grateful.

제안: Use correct tense and concise structure. Start with a clear past-tense topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail with linking words. Avoid redundant phrases.

예시: Yes, I loved cakes as a child. When I was in primary school my dad used to buy me a birthday cake each month, and I especially enjoyed the creamy vanilla frosting and the fresh fruit toppings.

제안: Be natural and concise: give a clear opinion then one specific recent example. Fix small grammar errors and use a suitable linking word like 'for example' or 'yesterday'.

예시: Yes, I often have dessert after meals. For example, yesterday after eating sushi I ordered a cookie ice cream, which was delicious and made the meal finish perfectly.

× I love to eat sweet food, desserts and cakes, and I remember that last week I bring a New York cheesecake and a couple of Donuts to my girlfriend's house and she was excited to see me because she loves food just as I do, and we have a great time together.

✓ I love to eat sweet food, desserts and cakes, and I remember that last week I brought a New York cheesecake and a couple of donuts to my girlfriend's house and she was excited to see me because she loves food just as I do, and we had a great time together.

Mixed tense error: the sentence uses present tense 'bring' for a past event. Use past tense 'brought' to match 'last week'. Also change 'we have a great time' to past 'we had a great time' to keep consistent past narrative. Use lowercase 'donuts'. (Grammar problem type ID: 6)

× They are uh, traditional Chinese cakes We eats, uh, during, uh, the Chinese New Year.

✓ They are, uh, traditional Chinese cakes we eat, uh, during the Chinese New Year.

Subject-verb agreement and verb form: 'We eats' is incorrect because the plural subject 'we' requires the base verb 'eat'. Also remove extra capital 'We' and unnecessary commas. (Grammar problem type ID: 27)

× Uh, is red in the color is very tangent and sticky.

✓ They are red in color and very fragrant and sticky.

Sentence fragments and wrong word choice: 'is red in the color' is awkward—use 'they are red in color' or simply 'they are red'. 'Tangent' is incorrect; likely intended 'fragrant' (or 'dense'). Also ensure subject-verb agreement 'They are'. (Grammar problem type ID: 13)

× Uh, we used to cook it with an egg so it don't stick together and it's very delicious.

✓ We used to cook it with an egg so it doesn't stick together, and it's very delicious.

Use of auxiliary: 'don't' is incorrect with singular 'it'; use 'doesn't'. Also maintain sentence structure with comma before conjunction. (Grammar problem type ID: 10)

× It's very sweet, sweet and I love.

✓ It's very sweet and I love it.

Incomplete sentence: 'I love' needs an object. Repeat 'sweet' is redundant; remove duplication and add 'it' to complete the clause. (Grammar problem type ID: 26)

× No, I cannot make case, however, I still remember my girlfriend, uh, last year, she made a uh, birthday cake for me, uh, to celebrate my birthday.

✓ No, I cannot make cakes; however, I still remember that last year my girlfriend made a birthday cake for me to celebrate my birthday.

Word choice and plural: 'case' should be 'cakes'. Use semicolon or period to separate independent clauses. Remove extra fillers and correct word order 'I still remember that last year my girlfriend made...'. (Grammar problem type ID: 1)

× Umm, although is uh, slightly burned, however is very delicious and I'm thankful for.

✓ Although it was slightly burned, it was very delicious and I'm thankful for it.

Missing subject 'it' and wrong tense/form: use 'it was' for past condition. 'Thankful for' needs an object 'it'. Remove redundant connectors 'although... however'—use one. (Grammar problem type ID: 5)

× I love to eat cakes when I was a child.

✓ I loved to eat cakes when I was a child.

Tense mismatch: talking about past habit requires past tense 'loved' rather than present 'love'. (Grammar problem type ID: 6)

× So when I was in primary school, I, my dad used to, uh, buy one of the birthday cake for me as a present, uh, every month.

✓ When I was in primary school, my dad used to buy a birthday cake for me as a present every month.

Article and quantifier: 'one of the birthday cake' is incorrect; use 'a birthday cake'. Remove unnecessary commas and fillers. (Grammar problem type ID: 14)

× And I love the creaminess from the vanilla cream and I love the fruits on the toppings.

✓ I loved the creaminess of the vanilla cream and the fruits on the topping.

Tense consistency with previous sentence: use past 'loved'. Use 'creaminess of' instead of 'from'. 'Toppings' can be singular 'topping' when referring to the cake's top layer, or 'toppings' if multiple; keep singular for fluency. (Grammar problem type ID: 13)

× I love to have desserts after meals and in fact I had one yesterday after my dinner.

✓ I like to have desserts after meals, and in fact I had one yesterday after my dinner.

Tense consistency and preference: 'I love to have desserts' is a general preference—'I like to have desserts' is more natural. The rest 'I had one yesterday' is correct past. Adjust for natural register. (Grammar problem type ID: 6)

× After I ate sushi, I ordered a cookie ice cream and it was delicious.

✓ After I ate sushi, I ordered a cookie ice cream and it was delicious.

This sentence is acceptable but 'a cookie ice cream' may be better as 'a cookie ice cream' or 'a cookie-flavored ice cream' depending on meaning. No strong grammatical error; keep as is. (Grammar problem type ID: 22)

× It I believe the dessert put a perfect end to the entire meal.

✓ I believe the dessert put a perfect end to the entire meal.

Word order error: remove stray 'It' at the start. The correct subject-verb order is 'I believe...'. (Grammar problem type ID: 26)