Coins— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is understandable but lacks fluency and contains some grammatical errors. Try to form complete sentences and avoid pauses or filler words. Also, be more concise and clear by saying, for example, "I don't use coins now because I find Apple Pay very convenient, so I usually just carry my phone when I go out."

예시: I don't use coins now because I find Apple Pay very convenient. Therefore, I usually just carry my phone when I go out instead of coins.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains confusing phrases like "my bullets will be happy." Try to express your ideas clearly and logically. For example, you could say, "Using coins is not convenient because they are heavy to carry and easy to lose."

예시: Using coins is not convenient because they are heavy to carry and easy to lose. That's why I prefer using digital payments.

제안: Your answer has good content but is interrupted by pauses and some grammatical mistakes. Try to speak more fluently and use linking words to connect ideas. For example, "Yes, I collected coins when I was a kid. Whenever I traveled, I found different coins interesting, so I usually collected coins from various countries."

예시: Yes, I collected coins when I was a kid. Whenever I traveled, I found different coins interesting, so I usually collected coins from various countries.

제안: Your answer is confusing due to unclear words like "alpha Fe" and "happy" and "wall." Try to use clear vocabulary and complete sentences. For example, "No, I don't carry coins when I go out because I always use Apple Pay on my phone, so I don't need to bring coins or a wallet."

예시: No, I don't carry coins when I go out because I always use Apple Pay on my phone, so I don't need to bring coins or a wallet.

× I don't use coins nowadays because. Apple Pay is useful to pay something.

✓ I don't use coins nowadays because Apple Pay is useful for paying for things.

The original sentence has an incorrect sentence break and awkward phrasing. 'Because.' should not be separated by a period. Also, 'useful to pay something' is incorrect; the correct form is 'useful for paying for things' to express purpose and object properly.

× Apple Pay is useful to pay something.

✓ Apple Pay is useful for paying for things.

The verb 'useful' is followed by 'for' plus a gerund to indicate purpose. 'To pay something' is incorrect; it should be 'for paying for things' to correctly express the intended meaning.

× So I don't bring, well, let's when I go out, I only bring my phone because there are Apple Pay.

✓ So I don't bring coins; well, when I go out, I only bring my phone because it has Apple Pay.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'There are Apple Pay' is incorrect; it should be 'it has Apple Pay' referring to the phone. Also, the sentence needs proper punctuation and structure for clarity.

× Is it convenient to use coins?

✓ Is it convenient to use coins?

This sentence is correct; no preposition error is present.

× It is not convenient to use coins because. When I bring coins, my bullets will. Be happy so and I needed to bring bullets when I go out, so I don't think it is convenient.

✓ It is not convenient to use coins because when I bring coins, my pockets get heavy, and I need to carry them when I go out, so I don't think it is convenient.

The original sentence has incorrect sentence breaks and unclear words ('bullets' likely intended as 'pockets'). The sentence needs to be combined properly and use correct vocabulary to convey the meaning clearly.

× Have you collected coins when you were a kid?

✓ Did you collect coins when you were a kid?

When referring to a specific time in the past ('when you were a kid'), the simple past tense 'Did you collect' is appropriate rather than the present perfect 'Have you collected'.

× I have a collected coins when I. Was a kid when I. When I go to travel.

✓ I collected coins when I was a kid and when I traveled.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains unnecessary pauses. The correct form combines the ideas into a clear sentence using simple past tense for past actions.

× I think the different coins looks. Curious to me, so I usually collected coins from different countries.

✓ I think the different coins look interesting to me, so I usually collected coins from different countries.

'Looks curious' is incorrect; 'look interesting' is a better collocation. Also, 'coins' is plural, so the verb should be 'look' not 'looks'.

× I usually collected coins from different countries.

✓ I usually collected coins from different countries.

This sentence is correct in past tense; no correction needed.

× No I don't carry coins when I go out because I always use alpha Fe in my phone thought I don't need to bring coins.

✓ No, I don't carry coins when I go out because I always use Apple Pay on my phone, so I don't need to bring coins.

'Alpha Fe' is a mishearing or typo of 'Apple Pay'. Also, 'in my phone' should be 'on my phone'. The sentence needs commas and conjunctions for clarity.

× Because it's a happy. An I don't want to bring wall that when I go out.

✓ Because it's handy, and I don't want to bring a wallet when I go out.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains incorrect words ('happy' instead of 'handy', 'wall' instead of 'wallet'). The sentence needs to be corrected for word choice and structure.