Coins— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer has some grammatical errors and unclear words like 'quiz' and 'are God'. Try to use clear and correct vocabulary and sentence structures. Also, avoid redundancy such as 'more much more'.

예시: No, I don't use coins much these days because online payments have become more popular and convenient. Most people prefer using digital wallets instead of carrying physical money like coins or notes. Therefore, coins are rarely used in daily transactions now.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains many errors. Focus on clear sentence structure and correct vocabulary. Explain why coins are inconvenient and mention alternatives clearly.

예시: No, using coins is not convenient nowadays because they are heavy and easy to lose. People prefer electronic payments as they are faster and more secure than carrying physical coins.

제안: Your answer has some unclear words like 'Queens' and 'use sum of money'. Try to use correct vocabulary and avoid repetition. Also, keep sentences concise and clear.

예시: Yes, I used to collect many coins when I was a child. I kept them in my piggy bank as a reward for good behavior. Collecting coins made me very happy during my childhood.

제안: Your answer is confusing with unclear words like 'Ivyann' and 'acario'. Use simple and clear sentences to explain why you don't carry coins and what you prefer instead.

예시: No, I usually don't carry coins when I go out because they are heavy and inconvenient. I prefer to carry a wallet with cards or use online banking to keep things light while traveling.

× No, I don't use quiz most these days because online payments have become more much more popular and convenient.

✓ No, I don't use coins much these days because online payments have become much more popular and convenient.

The word 'quiz' is incorrect here; it should be 'coins'. Also, 'more much more' is redundant; 'much more' is correct. 'Most these days' is incorrect; 'much these days' or 'much nowadays' is appropriate.

× Most people prefer using digital wallets are God instead of carrying physical money like coins or notes.

✓ Most people prefer using digital wallets or cards instead of carrying physical money like coins or notes.

The phrase 'are God' is a mishearing or typo; it should be 'or cards'. This is a pronoun/word misuse that changes the meaning.

× As a result, coins are rarely used in daily transaction now.

✓ As a result, coins are rarely used in daily transactions now.

The word 'transaction' should be plural 'transactions' because it refers to multiple instances.

× Nope, using coin is not convenient nowadays because of points are very much have you and it has got alternatives such as nodes also.

✓ Nope, using coins is not convenient nowadays because of the points are very many and it has alternatives such as notes also.

'Using coin' should be 'using coins' (plural). 'Points are very much have you' is incorrect; likely intended 'there are many points'. 'Nodes' should be 'notes'.

× E payment has become more famous nowadays rather than carrying of physical node.

✓ E-payment has become more popular nowadays rather than carrying physical notes.

'E payment' should be hyphenated 'E-payment'. 'More famous' is better as 'more popular'. 'Carrying of physical node' is incorrect; should be 'carrying physical notes'.

× Yes, I used to collect lots of coins in my early childhood.

✓ Yes, I used to collect lots of coins in my early childhood.

This sentence is correct in past tense and needs no correction.

× As I was rewarded with some of the Queens I used to collect them in my Piggy Bank.

✓ As I was rewarded with some of the coins, I used to collect them in my Piggy Bank.

'Queens' is incorrect; it should be 'coins'. This is a pronoun/word misuse.

× I collected use sum of money during my childhood with only Queens that I've collected in my piggy.

✓ I collected some sum of money during my childhood with only coins that I've collected in my piggy bank.

'Use sum' should be 'some sum'. 'Queens' should be 'coins'. 'Piggy' should be 'piggy bank' for clarity.

× Man, that made me very much happy.

✓ Man, that made me very happy.

'Very much happy' is incorrect; 'very happy' is the correct form.

× No, I don't usually carry coins when I go out as it is very much Ivyann so.

✓ No, I don't usually carry coins when I go out as it is very inconvenient.

'Ivyann' is a mishearing or typo; it should be 'inconvenient'.

× So while traveling I like to keep my things light.

✓ So, while traveling, I like to keep my things light.

Commas are needed after 'So' and 'while traveling' to separate clauses properly.

× So I'll rather acario wallet with contents, physical money or online banking while traveling so that that is why I don't carry no coins.

✓ So I'd rather carry a wallet with contents, physical money, or use online banking while traveling; that is why I don't carry coins.

'Acario' is incorrect; likely 'carry a'. 'So that that is why' is redundant; better to say 'that is why'. Double negative 'don't carry no coins' should be 'don't carry coins'.