Coins— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は自然ですが、"barcode payment system"の説明を少し具体的にし、文を簡潔にまとめるとより効果的です。例えば、"I usually pay by scanning a barcode with my phone, which is faster and more convenient than using coins."のようにすると良いでしょう。

예시: No, I don't use coins now because I usually pay by scanning a barcode with my phone, which is faster and more convenient than using coins.

제안: 回答は明確ですが、"useful"より"convenient"の方が質問に合っています。また、"because coins are light and small"の部分をもう少し具体的に説明すると良いです。例えば、"because they are easy to lose due to their small size and light weight."のように。

예시: No, I don't find using coins convenient because they are easy to lose due to their small size and light weight. For example, I often lose coins around my house.

제안: "corrected"は誤りで、正しくは"collected"です。また、文が長く冗長なので、簡潔にし、経験の詳細をもう少し具体的に述べると良いです。例えば、"I collected various coins as a kid. When I was in high school, I often bought foreign coins with my family and friends, which was a memorable experience."のように。

예시: Yes, I collected various coins when I was a kid. For example, in high school, I often bought foreign coins with my family and friends, which was a memorable experience.

제안: "background payment systems"は誤りで、正しくは"barcode payment systems"や"digital payment methods"です。また、文を簡潔にし、理由を明確に述べると良いです。例えば、"Yes, I always carry coins because some small shops near my house don't accept digital payments. For example, I need coins to buy snacks there."のように。

예시: Yes, I always carry coins because some small shops near my house don't accept digital payments. For example, I need coins to buy snacks there.

× Yes, I have corrected many kinds of coins.

✓ Yes, I have collected many kinds of coins.

The verb 'corrected' is incorrect in this context. The intended meaning is to say that the student gathered or accumulated coins, so the correct past participle form is 'collected'. 'Corrected' means to fix errors, which does not fit here.

× I often went to a shop near my house to buy foreign coins with my family and with my friends, which was an unforgettable experience for me.

✓ I often went to a shop near my house to buy foreign coins with my family and my friends, which was an unforgettable experience for me.

The preposition 'with' is unnecessarily repeated before 'my friends'. In English, when listing multiple people with the same preposition, it is common to use the preposition only once before the first item. Repeating 'with' is redundant and unnatural.

× Yes, I always carry coins with me because in some shops I can't purchase things with background payment systems.

✓ Yes, I always carry coins with me because in some shops I can't purchase things with barcode payment systems.

The phrase 'background payment systems' is incorrect and likely a typo or mishearing of 'barcode payment systems'. The correct prepositional phrase is 'with barcode payment systems' to indicate the method of payment.