Coins— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は質問に直接答えていますが、'cations'という単語の誤用や冗長な表現が見られます。より自然で簡潔な表現を心がけ、文法的な正確さを向上させましょう。

예시: No, I don't use coins anymore. I usually pay with my credit card or transportation card because it's quick and convenient.

제안: 内容が質問に対して少しずれており、意味が不明瞭な部分があります。質問に直接答え、具体的な理由や例を用いて説明することが重要です。

예시: No, I don't find coins convenient because they are heavy and easy to lose. Nowadays, many people prefer using digital payments like credit cards or mobile apps.

제안: 回答は具体的で内容も良いですが、文が少し長く複雑なので、簡潔に区切って話すとより自然です。

예시: Yes, I collected coins when I was a child. They had pictures of NFL athletes, which I liked because I enjoyed watching football games.

제안: 回答は質問に合っていますが、'Always'だけでなく、理由を述べる際に接続詞を使って文をつなげるとより自然です。

예시: Yes, I always carry some coins when I go out because I need them to buy drinks from vending machines, which don't accept credit cards.

× No, I don't use any coins and cations in my life.

✓ No, I don't use any coins and coupons in my life.

The word 'cations' seems to be a typo or incorrect plural form. Possibly, the intended word was 'coupons' or another plural noun. Ensure correct plural forms and spelling to convey the intended meaning.

× I usually use my credit card and other transportation card for making a payment and that's mainly because it's very useful and not time consuming and the process is very easy and not complicated.

✓ I usually use my credit card and other transportation cards to make payments, and that's mainly because it's very useful, not time-consuming, and the process is very easy and not complicated.

The phrase 'for making a payment' is better expressed as 'to make payments' for natural usage. Also, 'transportation card' should be plural if referring to more than one type. Hyphenate compound adjectives like 'time-consuming'.

× Recently the technology over using digital coins such as Bitcoin has been a widespread all over the world, so I think Imaginable 1 is a very useful one payment.

✓ Recently, the technology of using digital coins such as Bitcoin has become widespread all over the world, so I think Imagine 1 is a very useful payment method.

The phrase 'the technology over using' is incorrect; it should be 'the technology of using'. 'Has been a widespread' is incorrect; 'has become widespread' is correct. 'Imaginable 1' seems to be a mishearing or typo; corrected to 'Imagine 1'. 'One payment' is unclear; 'payment method' is clearer.

× Yes, and when I was a child, I collected some coins which illustrate the athlete of the National Football League in the US and that was my precious memory for me because I liked to watch football games in the US.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I collected some coins which illustrated athletes of the National Football League in the US, and that was a precious memory for me because I liked to watch football games in the US.

The verb 'illustrate' should be in past tense 'illustrated' to match the past context. 'The athlete' should be plural 'athletes' if referring to multiple coins. 'My precious memory for me' is redundant; 'a precious memory for me' is better.

× Always. Sometimes I carry some coins when I go to buy some drinks to a vending machine and that's mainly because I can't use any credit cards when I buy some items from the machine.

✓ Always. Sometimes I carry some coins when I go to buy drinks from a vending machine, and that's mainly because I can't use credit cards when I buy items from the machine.

The phrase 'go to buy some drinks to a vending machine' is incorrect; it should be 'buy drinks from a vending machine'. 'Can't use any credit cards' is better as 'can't use credit cards' for naturalness.