Coins— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答表达了观点，但语法和用词有误，且句子结构不够自然。建议注意动词形式和副词的正确使用，避免重复表达。

예시: No, I don't use coins anymore because nowadays I usually pay my bills with Alipay, which is very convenient and fast.

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和重复，表达不够清晰。建议使用更准确的表达方式，并避免重复词语。

예시: No, it's not convenient because sometimes shopkeepers give back fewer coins, and we have to carry them around, which can be troublesome.

제안: 回答内容丰富，但存在时态和语法错误。建议注意动词时态一致，使用复数形式和冠词，使表达更准确。

예시: Yes, I have. I collected coins from my father, who kept coins from Australia and Japan. They have many beautiful patterns and different shapes. I think collecting coins is a good way to preserve memories.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和表达不够流畅。建议使用更自然的句型，并注意词汇搭配和句子连贯性。

예시: It depends on whether I need to take the bus. I carry some coins because it's convenient and quick to put them into the bus fare box. But most of the time, I don't carry coins because I find it inconvenient.

× No, I don't use coins because today we often use Alipay to pay our bill.

✓ No, I don't use coins because today we often use Alipay to pay our bills.

这里的'bill'应该用复数形式'bills'，因为通常我们会有多笔账单需要支付，使用复数更符合实际语境。

× It convenient and quickly.

✓ It is convenient and quick.

这里缺少系动词'is'，'convenient'是形容词，'quickly'是副词，应该用形容词'quick'来修饰主语。正确表达是'It is convenient and quick.'。

× No it isn't, because when we use some coins, the shopkeeper will pay back less coins and we should keep these coins in our packet.

✓ No, it isn't, because when we use some coins, the shopkeeper will pay back fewer coins and we should keep these coins in our pocket.

'less'用于不可数名词，'coins'是可数名词，应该用'fewer'。另外，'packet'应为'packet'的拼写错误，正确是'pocket'，表示口袋。

× It is it is trouble for us.

✓ It is trouble for us.

句子中重复了'It is'，应删除多余部分，保持句子结构完整。

× Yes, I have. I have collect coins that from my father.

✓ Yes, I have. I have collected coins from my father.

现在完成时中，动词应使用过去分词形式，'collect'应改为'collected'。另外，'that'多余，应删除。

× He keep these coins from Australia and Japan.

✓ He keeps these coins from Australia and Japan.

主语是第三人称单数，动词应加-s，'keep'应改为'keeps'。

× There are many different beautiful pattern on them and they are in different shapes.

✓ There are many different beautiful patterns on them and they are in different shapes.

'pattern'应为复数形式'patterns'，因为有多个图案。

× I think it's a good way to keep memory.

✓ I think it's a good way to keep memories.

'memory'通常用复数'memories'表示回忆，且动词'keep'后面直接跟'memories'更自然。

× It depends what I need to take a bus.

✓ It depends on whether I need to take a bus.

'depends'后应接介词'on'，且表达条件时用'whether'引导宾语从句，句子结构更完整。

× I carry some coins because it's convenient and fast when I put them into the bus box.

✓ I carry some coins because it's convenient and fast when I put them into the bus fare box.

'bus box'表达不准确，正确应为'bus fare box'，表示公交投币箱。

× But almost time I don't carry coins.

✓ But most of the time I don't carry coins.

'almost time'表达不正确，正确表达是'most of the time'，表示大多数时间。