Coins— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by avoiding unnecessary phrases and focusing on the main point. For example, say "As an Egyptian, I don't use coins anymore because they are outdated; we mostly use paper money now."

예시: As an Egyptian, I don't use coins anymore because they are outdated; we mostly use paper money now.

제안: Make your answer more coherent by using linking words and clearer expressions. For example, "Yes, coins are convenient to use, but nowadays, people usually prefer paper money."

예시: Yes, coins are convenient to use, but nowadays, people usually prefer paper money.

제안: Improve fluency by avoiding repetition and adding linking words. For example, "Yes, I used to collect coins as a kid. I kept them in a box, and it was very enjoyable for me."

예시: Yes, I used to collect coins as a kid. I kept them in a box, and it was very enjoyable for me.

제안: Avoid repeating previous answers and make your response more direct. For example, "No, I don't carry coins when I go out because I prefer using paper money."

예시: No, I don't carry coins when I go out because I prefer using paper money.

× Actually now as an Egyptian person, we Egyptian do not use coins right now because I could.

✓ Actually now as an Egyptian person, we Egyptians do not use coins right now because I can't.

The modal verb 'could' is incorrectly used here to express present inability. The correct modal verb is 'can't' to indicate that we do not use coins now. Also, 'Egyptian' should be plural 'Egyptians' when referring to people collectively.

× Actually now as an Egyptian person, we Egyptian do not use coins right now because I could.

✓ Actually now as an Egyptian person, we Egyptians do not use coins right now because I can't.

The noun 'Egyptian' should be plural 'Egyptians' when referring to the group of people collectively.

× I would say it, it is expired now, so we use paper money.

✓ I would say it is expired now, so we use paper money.

The phrase 'I would say it, it is expired now' has an unnecessary comma and repetition of 'it'. Removing the comma and the repeated 'it' improves clarity and correctness.

× Yes, if you want to use coins nobody will complain about it, but it is casual now to use paper, not coins.

✓ Yes, if you want to use coins nobody will complain about it, but it is usual now to use paper, not coins.

The word 'casual' is incorrectly used here; the correct adjective is 'usual' to express common practice.

× Yes, I think it was a habit for me to collect the coins when I was a kid and I I put them together in a box and it was so much fun for me when I was young.

✓ Yes, I think it was a habit for me to collect coins when I was a kid and I put them together in a box and it was so much fun for me when I was young.

The phrase 'the coins' is unnecessarily definite; 'coins' without 'the' is more natural here. Also, the repeated 'I' is a typographical error and should be removed.

× No, as I mentioned, I don't use coins nowadays and I prefer to use paper money.

✓ No, as I mentioned, I don't use coins nowadays and I prefer to use paper money.

This sentence is grammatically correct and fits the present tense context, so no correction is needed.