Coins— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear but a bit lengthy and slightly repetitive. Try to be more concise and avoid redundancy. Also, clarify unclear terms like 'buzzfears' and 'St. performers' to make your answer more natural and understandable.

예시: Yes, I still use coins for small purchases like snacks and for giving donations to street performers. However, for most other payments, I prefer cashless methods.

제안: Your answer has some unclear phrases and grammatical errors which affect clarity. Avoid vague expressions like 'small processes' and 'buzz fears'. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and keep sentences grammatically correct.

예시: Absolutely, coins are convenient for small transactions, especially when the shop owner doesn't have change. They are handy for quick payments like buying snacks or using public transport.

제안: Your answer is good but a bit long and could be more structured. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details using linking words. Also, avoid informal phrases like 'cool memory' in formal speaking.

예시: Yes, I collected coins as a child. I kept them in a piggy bank and saved daily. It was a popular hobby among my friends, and I was proud when my collection reached nearly ₹5000.

제안: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and incomplete. Try to complete your sentences and avoid repeating similar ideas. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and concise.

예시: Yes, I carry coins in a small purse when I go out. I use them for small payments like bus fares and for giving donations to people in need.

× Yes, I still do use coins now for small transactions like buying snacks and buzzfears and also when I am on the road and I see some St. performers or in times of charity donation.

✓ Yes, I still use coins now for small transactions like buying snacks and bus fares and also when I am on the road and I see some street performers or during times of charity donation.

The phrase 'do use' is unnecessary here; simple present tense 'use' is sufficient. Also, 'buzzfears' seems to be a typo for 'bus fares' and 'St. performers' should be 'street performers'. 'In times of charity donation' is better expressed as 'during times of charity donation'. These corrections improve clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Absolutely, I believe it is quite convenient to use coins for small processes which does not require a huge exchange of gas and it comes as handy when the transaction the shop owner doesn't have a change with them.

✓ Absolutely, I believe it is quite convenient to use coins for small purchases which do not require a huge exchange of cash and it comes in handy when the shop owner doesn't have change with them during the transaction.

The word 'processes' is incorrect; 'purchases' fits better. 'Does not' should be 'do not' to agree with plural 'purchases'. 'Exchange of gas' is a typo for 'exchange of cash'. The phrase 'comes as handy' should be 'comes in handy'. Also, 'the transaction the shop owner doesn't have a change with them' is awkward; rephrased for clarity.

× And also for small transactions in the buzz fears and it's also.

✓ And also for small transactions like bus fares, and it's also convenient.

'Buzz fears' is a typo for 'bus fares'. The sentence is incomplete and unclear; adding 'like bus fares' and completing the sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yes, as a kid I have collected coins.

✓ Yes, as a kid I collected coins.

When referring to a completed action in the past, simple past tense 'collected' is appropriate rather than present perfect 'have collected'.

× I had my own Piggy Bank where I used to put coins on a daily basis and it was a common hobby among my friends those days and it was a cool memory for us and I was quite impressed with my huge collection of coins which accounted to almost ₹5000 when I opened it.

✓ I had my own piggy bank where I used to put coins on a daily basis. It was a common hobby among my friends those days and a cool memory for us. I was quite impressed with my huge collection of coins which amounted to almost ₹5000 when I opened it.

'Accounted to' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'amounted to'. Also, the sentence is long and can be split for clarity. 'Piggy Bank' should not be capitalized unless it is a proper noun.

× Yes, I still carry coins when I go out. I have a purse for carrying coins and when I'm on the road I use it for small transactions and in the bus and also to give it as a charity donations in the roads and also to.

✓ Yes, I still carry coins when I go out. I have a purse for carrying coins and when I'm on the road, I use them for small transactions, on the bus, and also to give as charity donations on the roads.

'In the bus' should be 'on the bus'. 'Give it as a charity donations' is incorrect; it should be 'give as charity donations'. The sentence was incomplete and has been completed for clarity and correctness.