Coins— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Ваш ответ естественный, но можно улучшить структуру и связность. Начните с прямого ответа, затем добавьте детали с использованием связующих слов. Также избегайте повторения слов, например, "coins" и "cash" можно объединить.

예시: Yes, I still use coins occasionally, but I prefer credit cards because cash can be inconvenient. For example, coins are bulky and slow down transactions.

제안: Ответ хороший, но можно улучшить связность и разнообразить лексику. Используйте связующие слова, чтобы сделать ответ более плавным, и избегайте повторения слов "coins" и "inconvenient".

예시: I think coins are quite inconvenient nowadays because we need to count them carefully, which wastes time. Furthermore, they occupy a lot of space in our wallets, so I usually prefer using credit cards.

제안: Ответ информативный и структурированный, но можно сделать его более естественным, используя более простые конструкции и связующие слова для плавности.

예시: No, I didn't collect coins as a child because coins were not used in my country's economy back then. Although I knew about coins, I never actually held any.

제안: Ответ хороший, но можно улучшить связность и разнообразить лексику. Используйте связующие слова и более естественные выражения, чтобы сделать ответ более плавным и понятным.

예시: Even though I find coins inconvenient, I usually carry some when I go out because I sometimes need them to pay extra fares on public transport.

× Yes I do, but only from time to time because cash including coins is inconvenient for me, so I prefer credit card.

✓ Yes, I do, but only from time to time because cash, including coins, is inconvenient for me, so I prefer credit cards.

The phrase 'cash including coins' needs commas to separate the phrase 'including coins' as a non-restrictive clause. Also, 'credit card' should be plural 'credit cards' to match the general preference. Adding commas improves clarity and corrects the prepositional phrase usage.

× I believe that nowadays coins are inconvenient method of payments because we have to count them carefully before paying, which may take a lot of time.

✓ I believe that nowadays coins are an inconvenient method of payment because we have to count them carefully before paying, which may take a lot of time.

The phrase 'method of payments' is incorrect; it should be 'method of payment' because 'method' is singular and 'payment' is uncountable here. Also, the article 'an' is needed before 'inconvenient method' to be grammatically correct.

× Moreover, coins take up too much place in our values, so I prefer credit cards.

✓ Moreover, coins take up too much space in our valuables, so I prefer credit cards.

The word 'place' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'space' to indicate physical volume. Also, 'values' is incorrect; the intended word is 'valuables' meaning valuable items. This corrects the prepositional and noun usage.

× When I was a kid, I didn't collect coins because there weren't any coins in the economic system of my country in my childhood.

✓ When I was a kid, I didn't collect coins because there weren't any coins in the economic system of my country during my childhood.

The phrase 'in my childhood' is better expressed as 'during my childhood' to correctly indicate the time period. This is a prepositional usage correction.

× Therefore, although I knew what is coin, I had never held them in my hands.

✓ Therefore, although I knew what a coin is, I had never held one in my hands.

The phrase 'what is coin' is incorrect; it should be 'what a coin is' to form an indirect question. Also, 'them' is plural but 'coin' is singular, so 'one' should be used to match the singular noun.

× Although I don't like coins and I think they are inconvenient, I usually collect some of them when I go out because I sometimes pay extra in public transport with coins.

✓ Although I don't like coins and think they are inconvenient, I usually collect some of them when I go out because I sometimes pay extra on public transport with coins.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect when referring to 'public transport'; the correct preposition is 'on' to indicate usage of a mode of transport.