Coins— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Clarify and correct minor language issues, avoid redundancy, and keep within 3–4 sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail and a brief example. Remove unclear fragments (e.g., "some small stones Still prefer cash").

예시: Not really — I usually pay with my smartphone using apps like WeChat or Alipay because it’s fast and convenient. I do sometimes use cash during the Spring Festival, though, because people give red envelopes of money. For example, I receive small notes from relatives and prefer to keep them as gifts.

제안: Good structure and clear points; tighten language and add a linking phrase to show contrast. Limit to 3 sentences and add one specific example or brief comparison to strengthen the answer.

예시: I find coins inconvenient because they’re heavy and only useful for small purchases. For example, I might use coins for a bus fare or a cheap coffee, but for most things I use contactless smartphone payments because they’re much faster and easier.

제안: Strong answer: clear topic sentence, specific details and a result. To improve, combine sentences to sound more natural and use a linking word to show consequence. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes. When I was a child I saved spare change in a piggy bank and checked it weekly; as a result, I eventually had enough to buy small things like a Barbie doll or a snack, which taught me the habit of saving.

제안: Clear and natural response. To be slightly more concise, start with a strong topic sentence and use one linking phrase to give the exception. Add a brief specific example of when you used coins recently to increase authenticity.

예시: I rarely carry coins because I usually pay with my smartphone — digital payments are faster and more convenient. However, I do use coins at the Spring Festival when relatives give me lucky money; for instance, I received cash from my aunt last year and used some for street food.

× However, I do use cash or coins during the Spring Festival since people traditionally give cash in red envelopes and some small stones Still prefer cash.

✓ However, I do use cash during the Spring Festival since people traditionally give cash in red envelopes and some people still prefer cash.

The original sentence has sentence structure problems and missing conjunctions/words: 'some small stones Still prefer cash' is ungrammatical and likely a typo. It should be 'some people still prefer cash.' Correcting this fixes meaning and produces a complete, grammatically correct sentence. Suggestion: proofread for typos and ensure each clause has a subject and verb.

× Their value is low, so I can only use them for small purchases like a bus fare or a coffee.

✓ Their value is low, so I can only use them for small purchases like bus fare or a cup of coffee.

'a bus fare' is awkward because 'fare' is usually uncountable in this context; 'a coffee' is colloquial but ambiguous. Use 'bus fare' (uncountable) and 'a cup of coffee' to be clear. Suggestion: choose countable/uncountable nouns appropriately.

× I usually put spare change into a Piggy Bank and checked it every week.

✓ I usually put spare change into a piggy bank and checked it every week.

'Piggy Bank' in the middle of a sentence should not be capitalized; also 'a piggy bank' is correct with the indefinite article. Suggestion: use lowercase for common nouns and include appropriate articles.

× I usually put spare change into a piggy bank and checked it every week.

✓ I usually put spare change into a piggy bank and checked it every week.

This sentence mixes present habitual 'I usually put' with past 'checked.' For speaking about childhood habits, use past tense consistently: 'I used to put spare change into a piggy bank and checked it every week' or better 'I used to put spare change into a piggy bank and check it every week.' Suggestion: maintain consistent tense in the same sentence; use 'used to' for past habits.

× I prefer paying with my smartphone because contactless payments are much faster and more convenient.

✓ I prefer to pay with my smartphone because contactless payments are much faster and more convenient.

Both 'prefer paying' and 'prefer to pay' are grammatical, but 'prefer to pay' is slightly more natural here. This is a stylistic adjustment rather than strict grammar. Suggestion: choose consistent verb forms after 'prefer.'

× I can only use them for small purchases like bus fare or a cup of coffee.

✓ I can only use them for small purchases such as bus fare or a cup of coffee.

'Like' is acceptable but 'such as' is more formal and precise when giving examples. This is a stylistic improvement focusing on modal scope clarity. Suggestion: use 'such as' for clearer examples.

× To be honest, I rarely carry coins when I go out.

✓ To be honest, I rarely carry coins when I go out.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed; included for completeness.

× I do occasionally use coins during the Spring Festival though, since my relatives give me lucky money in cash at that time.

✓ I do occasionally use coins during the Spring Festival, though, since my relatives give me lucky money in cash at that time.

Add commas to set off the parenthetical 'though' for correct punctuation and natural rhythm. The grammar is otherwise correct. Suggestion: punctuate parenthetical adverbs with commas.