Laughing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Jawaban Anda kurang jelas dan tidak terstruktur dengan baik. Cobalah untuk memberikan kalimat utama yang jelas dan mendukungnya dengan detail yang spesifik dan relevan. Hindari pengulangan dan gunakan kosakata yang tepat untuk menjelaskan makna tawa dalam kehidupan sehari-hari.

예시: I think laughter is an important part of daily life because it brings happiness and helps people connect with each other. For example, when we laugh with friends or family, it strengthens our relationships and makes life more enjoyable.

제안: Jawaban Anda kurang jelas dan sulit dipahami. Cobalah untuk menjelaskan waktu dan situasi dengan kalimat yang lebih terstruktur dan gunakan kosakata yang tepat untuk menggambarkan kejadian yang membuat Anda tertawa.

예시: The last time I laughed was when I was in Alaska with my nephew. He accidentally fell twice while playing, and it was so funny that we both laughed a lot.

제안: Jawaban Anda agak membingungkan dan tidak terstruktur dengan baik. Cobalah untuk memberikan jawaban yang jelas dan langsung, serta jelaskan dengan contoh bagaimana Anda membuat orang lain tertawa.

예시: Sometimes I can make other people laugh, especially my friends. We often share funny moments together, which helps us enjoy each other's company.

제안: Jawaban Anda mengandung beberapa kesalahan dan kurang jelas. Cobalah untuk menyusun kalimat yang lebih sederhana dan jelas, serta jelaskan alasan Anda menyukai film lucu dengan detail yang spesifik.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy watching funny movies because they make me laugh and help me forget about my problems. Watching comedies is a good way to relax and feel happy.

× In my opinion, laughter means happiness an enjoyable and fun and convenient with something that happens in a daily life.

✓ In my opinion, laughter means happiness, enjoyment, fun, and is connected with things that happen in daily life.

The original sentence incorrectly uses adjectives and conjunctions, making it unclear and grammatically incorrect. 'An enjoyable and fun and convenient' is awkward and incorrect. The correction uses nouns 'happiness, enjoyment, fun' and clarifies the connection with daily life events for better clarity and grammar.

× So if someone laughing, yeah, how we are going to connect to the love with someone with Murphy so we can live together because it has connection.

✓ So if someone is laughing, yeah, how are we going to connect with love to someone, so we can live together because there is a connection.

The original sentence misses the auxiliary verb 'is' before 'laughing' which is necessary for the present continuous tense. Also, the sentence structure is confusing and needs rephrasing for clarity and correct verb forms.

× Oh, for the last time, I loved. Is when I was in Alaska 2 with my nephew and then he fought.

✓ Oh, the last time I laughed was when I was in Alaska with my nephew and then he fell.

The verb 'loved' is incorrectly used instead of 'laughed' to describe the action of laughing. Also, 'fought' is incorrect in this context; likely the intended word is 'fell' to describe the nephew falling. The sentence also has unnecessary words and needs restructuring.

× He fought on the ground and then yeah I loved because he for fall twice and he also love together.

✓ He fell on the ground, and then yeah, I laughed because he fell twice and we laughed together.

'Fought' is incorrectly used instead of 'fell'. 'Loved' is incorrectly used instead of 'laughed'. The sentence also has tense inconsistencies and unclear phrasing that need correction for proper past tense and clarity.

× Sometimes I can make other people laugh if but it's not my husband I cannot make my husbands love, but if my my friends.

✓ Sometimes I can make other people laugh, but not my husband; I cannot make my husband laugh, but I can make my friends laugh.

The original sentence has modal verb misuse and confusing structure. 'Cannot make my husbands love' is incorrect; it should be 'cannot make my husband laugh'. The sentence needs clearer modal verb usage and subject-verb agreement.

× Of course we we often live together because there are many something that funny momen and make us laugh kid.

✓ Of course, we often live together because there are many funny moments that make us laugh like kids.

The sentence has pronoun repetition ('we we'), incorrect quantifiers ('many something'), and awkward phrasing. Correct pronoun use and quantifiers improve clarity and grammar.

× Yes, I do really enjoy watching funny movies because if I watch funnel vision our Moat will be connected with the laughing and we forget about the problem in our life and also I mean we relax our life and others.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy watching funny movies because when I watch funny videos, our mood is connected with laughter and we forget about problems in our lives; also, it helps us relax.

The original sentence has incorrect adjectives ('funnel vision'), awkward phrasing, and unclear meaning. Correct adjectives and clearer sentence structure improve understanding and grammar.