Road— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce hesitations and repetition, correct grammar and make sentences concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid filler words like 'umm' and repetition such as 'many many'.

예시: Yes, the roads near my home are quite busy. This is because the area is an intersection connecting the main road and the highway, so many commuters and buses pass through it every day.

제안: Remove fillers and use clearer linking words. Give a topic sentence, then add a specific example or consequence. Use correct verb forms (e.g., 'get across' or 'cross safely').

예시: Yes, pedestrians cross the roads frequently, especially during rush hour. As a result, many people rely on zebra crossings and pedestrian signals to cross safely.

제안: Fix accuracy and vocabulary mistakes, avoid unrelated or garbled words (e.g., 'potassium ha'). Provide a clear contrast: state the general condition, then explain exceptions with linking words like 'however' or 'but'.

예시: Generally, the roads in my city are in good and safe condition because there are many stop signs and traffic lights. However, during construction some roads are closed, so pedestrians and drivers often need to use alternative routes.

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar (e.g., 'many of the streets' not 'many of the are streets'). Start with a clear opinion, then give one or two specific reasons and, if possible, a suggested solution. Use linking words like 'because' and 'therefore'.

예시: Yes, I think the roads need improvement because many streets are very narrow, forcing pedestrians to walk close to fast-moving traffic. Therefore, widening sidewalks or creating pedestrian zones would make the streets much safer.

× Yes, the roads in the area I live are actually pretty busy in week, weekdays and even weekends because it's actually an intersections that connects the main road and the highway.

✓ Yes, the roads in the area where I live are actually pretty busy on weekdays and even weekends because it's actually an intersection that connects the main road and the highway.

Error: incorrect or missing preposition and article use ('in week, weekdays' and 'an intersections'). Reason: Use 'where I live' to indicate location and 'on weekdays' to talk about days of the week. 'An intersections' is wrong because 'intersection' is singular; use 'an intersection'. Suggestion: Say 'in the area where I live' and 'on weekdays' and ensure singular/plural agreement for nouns.

× So many many umm workers have to pass through the roads and many buses so.

✓ So many workers have to pass through the roads, and there are many buses as well.

Error: missing subject-verb structure and awkward fragment. Reason: The original sentence lacks a clear verb for 'many buses' and is a fragment. Suggestion: Combine clauses with a clear verb and subject, e.g., 'there are many buses' to complete the sentence.

× Yes, umm, actually pedestrians cross the road all the time here, umm, during rush hours, uh, they can be very crowded and uh, many people rely on the zebra crossing to get cross safely.

✓ Yes, actually pedestrians cross the roads all the time here. During rush hours they can be very crowded, and many people rely on the zebra crossings to cross safely.

Error: incorrect verb form 'get cross' and plural nouns. Reason: Use 'cross' as the verb (not 'get cross') and match plural nouns ('roads', 'zebra crossings') if referring to multiple. Suggestion: Use simple present consistently and correct verb 'cross' and pluralize where appropriate.

× The roads in our city are generally very safe because we have installed many stop signs and stop lights for the pedestrians.

✓ The roads in our city are generally very safe because we have installed many stop signs and traffic lights for pedestrians.

Error: use of 'stop lights' and article 'the' with 'pedestrians'. Reason: 'Traffic lights' is the common term; 'for the pedestrians' is unnatural when speaking generally—use 'for pedestrians'. Suggestion: Use commonly accepted vocabulary and omit unnecessary definite articles.

× But due to constructions, sometimes the roads might be closed so the potassium ha have to find other means to cross the roads.

✓ But due to construction, sometimes the roads might be closed, so people have to find other ways to get across them.

Errors: wrong noun form 'constructions', nonsensical word 'potassium ha', awkward phrasing. Reason: 'Construction' is the uncountable noun used for work on roads; 'people' is the intended subject; use 'ways' and 'get across' for crossing roads. Suggestion: Replace incorrect words with correct ones and restructure the sentence into a clear, grammatical form.

× I do think the roads in my city need improvements because many of the are streets in my cities are very narrow so people who are walking on the roads are actually really close to the main road and which can be very dangerous since during traffic hours there are so many.

✓ I do think the roads in my city need improvement because many of the streets in my city are very narrow, so people walking on them are actually very close to the main road, which can be very dangerous during rush hour when there is heavy traffic.

Errors: wrong articles, pluralization, and sentence fragments. Reason: 'need improvement' is the natural phrase (uncountable), 'many of the are streets' is jumbled—should be 'many of the streets in my city'. 'People who are walking on the roads are actually really close' is wordy; use 'people walking on them'. 'Which can be very dangerous since during traffic hours there are so many' is incomplete—specify 'heavy traffic' and 'rush hour'. Suggestion: Remove extraneous articles, correct noun number, and simplify clauses for clarity.