Road— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, correct word choice (business → busy), avoid fillers, and add one brief specific detail. Keep to 2–3 sentences and use a linking word if adding detail.

예시: Yes, the roads near my home are very busy. For example, every weekday morning there are many cars and pedestrians because people commute to work, so the streets feel quite crowded.

제안: Answer directly and clearly: give a topic sentence about how people cross, avoid unclear phrases (need to close the road), and include a specific detail about how they cross and any safety measures, using a linking word to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, most people use designated crossings to get across the road. For instance, pedestrians usually use crosswalks and wait for the traffic light or a pedestrian signal to ensure it is safe.

제안: Provide a direct topic sentence about road condition and use correct vocabulary (e.g. 'Senda' unclear — use 'My city' or name). Add one specific detail about maintenance and link ideas with a connector. Avoid irrelevant words.

예시: The roads in my city are generally in good condition and fairly clean. For example, street cleaners collect trash every morning, and potholes are repaired regularly in most neighborhoods.

제안: Be specific and concise: give a clear reason why improvements are needed, correct grammar (e.g. 'traffic lights take too long'), quantify or give an example, and connect sentences with a linking word to show cause and effect.

예시: Yes, I think some traffic lights take too long, which delays my commute. For example, I often wait an extra ten minutes at one junction, so shortening the light cycles or adding a pedestrian phase would help reduce delays.

× 'I currently live in a business St.'

✓ 'I currently live on a busy street.'

'business St.' is incorrect: 'business' is a noun/adjective meaning commerce, but the intended adjective is 'busy' meaning crowded. Also use the preposition on for streets and spell out 'street' or use the abbreviation correctly (St.). Replace 'business St.' with 'busy street' to convey the intended meaning.'},{