Perfume— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it can be improved by avoiding redundancy and making the sentences more natural. For example, instead of saying "I enjoy wearing fragrances as it makes me feel more confident in front of everyone" and then "Moreover, I use fragrances occasionally," you can combine these ideas more smoothly and avoid repeating the idea of using fragrances. Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas.

예시: Yes, I like wearing perfume because it boosts my confidence when I meet people. However, I only use it occasionally, usually on special occasions.

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors and unclear phrases, which affect the naturalness and effectiveness. Try to use simple and clear sentences, and avoid unclear or incorrect words. Also, provide specific supporting details with proper linking words to make your answer coherent.

예시: Yes, I use perfume daily because it is very popular in my country. For example, I prefer light floral scents as they are refreshing and suitable for everyday use.

제안: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by correcting minor grammatical errors and making the sentence more natural. Also, try to add linking words and specific reasons to support your opinion.

예시: Yes, I think buying perfume as a gift is a great idea because it shows appreciation and can make the recipient happy.

제안: Your answer has some grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases like "with the insulation" which should be "with the inflation." Try to use correct vocabulary and sentence structures. Also, organise your ideas clearly with linking words to improve coherence.

예시: Definitely yes, perfumes can be expensive due to inflation and high demand in my country. However, there are many options available at different price ranges, so not only expensive perfumes are popular.

× Fragrances are highly favored in my country so I have also wide variety of perfumes which makes me feel refreshed and confident.

✓ Fragrances are highly favored in my country, so I also have a wide variety of perfumes which make me feel refreshed and confident.

The phrase 'wide variety' requires the article 'a' before it, and 'variety' is singular, so the verb should be 'make' to agree with the plural noun 'perfumes'. Also, a comma is needed before 'so' to separate the clauses.

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✓ For example, I prefer light floral scents that are subtle yet pleasant.

The original sentence is unclear and contains nonsensical words. It seems the student intended to say they prefer light floral scents that are subtle and pleasant. The correction provides a clear, grammatically correct sentence conveying this meaning.

× According to me, giving gift as a perfume is a very nice thought because it it can be a sign of appreciation for somebody or can bring a smile.

✓ According to me, giving a gift such as perfume is a very nice thought because it can be a sign of appreciation for somebody or can bring a smile.

The phrase 'giving gift' requires the article 'a' before 'gift'. Also, 'as a perfume' is better expressed as 'such as perfume' to indicate an example. The repeated 'it' is corrected to a single 'it'.

× With the insulation the prices of every product is high and as fragrances are highly favored in my country and there are wide variety of perfumes are available an that varies in prizes as well.

✓ With inflation, the prices of every product are high, and as fragrances are highly favored in my country, there is a wide variety of perfumes available, and their prices vary as well.

'Insulation' is incorrect; the correct word is 'inflation'. 'Prices' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' not 'is'. 'Wide variety' requires the article 'a'. The phrase 'are available an that varies in prizes' is corrected to 'available, and their prices vary'. 'Prizes' is incorrect; the correct word is 'prices'.