Perfume— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical errors and unclear phrases such as 'do you have Romar?'. Try to use clearer and grammatically correct sentences. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences. For example, you can say: 'I don't like perfume because some family members are sensitive to strong smells, which can affect their health.'

예시: I don't like perfume because some of my family members are sensitive to strong scents, which might affect their health. Therefore, I avoid using perfume altogether.

제안: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by correcting grammar and linking ideas more smoothly. For example, use 'are' instead of 'is' for plural nouns and connect your ideas with linking words like 'because'.

예시: No, I don't use perfume daily because the detergents I use in the washing machine already give my clothes a pleasant smell, so I prefer not to have too many scents on my body.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but has some grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Try to use clearer expressions and correct sentence structures. Also, avoid repeating 'I won't buy it' unnecessarily.

예시: I wouldn't buy perfume as a gift because perfumes are usually expensive, sometimes costing over 1000 HKD, which is unaffordable for me as a student.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to express your opinion clearly and use complete sentences. For example, you can say: 'Yes, I think perfumes are expensive because they can cost about four times the average price of other products.'

예시: Yes, I think perfumes are expensive because their prices can be about four times higher than the average cost of other items.

× I think I don't like perfume because in my family there are some family members who is sensitive to do you have Romar?

✓ I think I don't like perfume because in my family there are some family members who are sensitive to do you have Romar?

The subject 'family members' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is' to agree in number. This is a subject-verb agreement error.

× who is sensitive to do you have Romar?

✓ who are sensitive to perfume?

The phrase 'sensitive to do you have Romar?' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'sensitive to perfume' to correctly express sensitivity to the scent. This is an incorrect use of prepositions and unclear phrasing.

× Like if the perfume is smell so strong it may affect the health so I did not.

✓ If the perfume smells so strong, it may affect health, so I do not like it.

The phrase 'is smell so strong' is incorrect; 'smells so strong' is correct because 'smell' is a verb here. Also, 'did not' is incomplete and unclear; it should be 'do not like it.' This is an incorrect use of verb form and sentence structure.

× Like perfume at all.

✓ I do not like perfume at all.

The sentence fragment 'Like perfume at all.' lacks a subject and verb, making it incomplete. Adding 'I do not' completes the sentence. This is a sentence structure error.

× I think the detergents in the washing machine is already good enough with a good smell,

✓ I think the detergents in the washing machine are already good enough with a good smell,

The subject 'detergents' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is' to agree in number. This is a subject-verb agreement error.

× so I do not want to have so much. Smell in my body.

✓ so I do not want to have so much smell on my body.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect here; 'on' is the correct preposition to describe smell on the body. This is an incorrect use of prepositions.

× I won't buy perfume as a gift to my friends because I think perfume in the market is usually high,

✓ I won't buy perfume as a gift for my friends because I think perfume in the market is usually expensive,

The phrase 'perfume as a gift to my friends' should use 'for' instead of 'to' to indicate the recipient of the gift. Also, 'is usually high' is incorrect; 'is usually expensive' is appropriate to describe price. This involves modal verb usage and adjective use.

× for example like maybe reached 2600 or 1000 and it is quite unaffordable for me as I'm a student so I won't buy it.

✓ for example, it may reach 2600 or 1000, and it is quite unaffordable for me as I'm a student, so I won't buy it.

The phrase 'like maybe reached' is incorrect; 'it may reach' is correct to express possibility. Also, commas are needed for clarity. This is an incorrect use of verb tense and sentence structure.

× Yes, I think perfume is expensive like it can. It may takes around. Four times of the average payout, Lee.

✓ Yes, I think perfume is expensive; it may take around four times the average payout, Lee.

The verb 'takes' should be 'take' after modal 'may'. Also, the sentence is fragmented and needs proper punctuation. 'Four times of the average payout' should be 'four times the average payout'. This is a singular/plural and sentence structure error.