Perfume— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and lacks clarity. Try to give a clear topic sentence and avoid redundancy. Also, use correct grammar and more natural phrasing.

예시: Yes, I really like perfumes and have a good collection at home. I enjoy trying different brands to find my favourite scents.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to answer directly with a clear topic sentence, use linking words, and provide specific reasons or examples.

예시: Yes, I use perfume every day, especially in summer, because it helps me feel fresh and confident. I think wearing perfume is an essential part of my daily routine.

제안: Your answer is clear but could be improved by avoiding redundancy and using more precise vocabulary. Also, add linking words to make your answer more coherent.

예시: Yes, I often buy perfume as a gift because most people appreciate nice scents. Therefore, I believe perfume is one of the best presents to give.

제안: Your answer has some unclear phrases and grammatical mistakes. Try to organise your ideas logically using linking words and provide specific examples with correct brand names.

예시: I think some perfumes are quite expensive, especially well-known brands like Gucci, Versace, and Dior. However, there are also affordable local brands that offer good quality scents.

× Yes, I like perfumes instead, like I love perfumes.

✓ Yes, I like perfumes; in fact, I love perfumes.

The original sentence uses 'instead' incorrectly and has awkward phrasing. 'Instead' is used to indicate a substitute, which doesn't fit here. The correction improves clarity and flow by replacing 'instead' with a semicolon and rephrasing the sentence.

× I used every brand perfume.

✓ I have used every brand of perfume.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'used' in simple past without auxiliary verb and omits the preposition 'of' after 'brand'. The present perfect 'have used' is more appropriate to indicate experience up to now, and 'brand of perfume' is the correct phrase.

× But if you miss a day, l'essentiel oflife, it is so important.

✓ But if you miss a day, l'essentiel of life, it is very important.

The sentence is unclear and contains a typo 'oflife' which should be 'of life'. Also, 'so important' is better expressed as 'very important' for clarity. However, 'l'essentiel of life' is a French phrase meaning 'the essential of life' and may be confusing; it might be better to rephrase or explain.

× We have to wear perfume, specially in Somers.

✓ We have to wear perfume, especially in summers.

'Specially' is incorrect here; the correct adverb is 'especially'. Also, 'Somers' is a misspelling of 'summers'. The correction fixes both errors.

× Some people don't wear I think.

✓ Some people don't wear it, I think.

The pronoun 'I' is incorrectly used instead of 'it' to refer to perfume. The correction replaces 'I' with 'it' to correctly refer to the object.

× Without perfume, there's no life in Somers.

✓ Without perfume, there's no life in summers.

'Somers' is a misspelling of 'summers'. The correction fixes the spelling error.

× Yes, obviously I love to buy perfume as a gift because everyone likes perfume, so I think perfume is a best gift to give someone.

✓ Yes, obviously I love to buy perfume as a gift because everyone likes perfume, so I think perfume is the best gift to give someone.

The phrase 'a best gift' is incorrect; 'best' is a superlative adjective and should be preceded by the definite article 'the'. The correction fixes the article usage.

× I think 5050 some perfumes are more expensive like the Ender perfumes for example, Gucci, Florida, Versace perfumes.

✓ I think 50-50; some perfumes are more expensive, like the designer perfumes, for example, Gucci, Florida, Versace perfumes.

'5050' is unclear and likely intended as '50-50' to mean 'half and half'. 'Ender' is likely a typo for 'designer'. The correction clarifies these terms and improves sentence structure.

× The well known brands perfumes are where they expensive.

✓ The well-known brand perfumes are expensive.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and grammar. 'Well known' should be hyphenated as 'well-known' when used as an adjective before a noun. 'Brands perfumes' is incorrect; it should be 'brand perfumes'. The phrase 'are where they expensive' is ungrammatical and is corrected to 'are expensive'.

× But there is also a choice of local perfumes like our local brand perfumes.

✓ But there is also a choice of local perfumes, like our local brand perfumes.

The sentence is mostly correct but adding a comma before 'like' improves readability. No major grammatical error is present here.