Perfume— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答不够连贯，表达不清晰，语法错误较多，建议简化句子结构，直接回答问题，并用具体细节支持观点。

예시: Yes, I like perfume very much. I have collected nearly 30 bottles because I enjoy how different scents can create various feelings.

제안: 回答中有语法和表达错误，句子不够流畅，建议使用简单明了的句子，直接回答并用具体原因支持。

예시: Yes, I use perfume every day unless I have a headache. Wearing perfume makes me feel confident and refreshed.

제안: 表达不清晰，语法错误多，建议先直接回答问题，再用具体理由支持，避免重复和不必要的内容。

예시: Yes, I would buy perfume as a gift for my close friends or family because it is a special and thoughtful present, even though it can be expensive.

제안: 回答不完整且语法错误较多，建议用完整句子表达观点，并用具体例子说明价格差异。

예시: Yes, perfumes are usually expensive. For example, branded perfumes cost more on official websites than on other online platforms where prices are cheaper.

× I have a pre film addiction.

✓ I have a perfume addiction.

单复数错误，'pre film'应为'perfume'，且此处应使用单数形式表示一种嗜好。

× I thought nearly 30 boxes of perfume.

✓ I bought nearly 30 bottles of perfume.

动词错误，'thought'应为'bought'（买），且'boxes'应改为'bottles'，因为香水通常用瓶子装。

× A bottle, I know.

✓ One bottle, I know.

数量词使用错误，'A bottle'应为'One bottle'更明确表达数量。

× I was so obsessed with the difference.

✓ I was so obsessed with the different scents.

形容词使用不当，'difference'应改为形容词'different'，并补充名词'scents'使句子完整。

× To me it gives me a different feelings.

✓ To me, it gives me different feelings.

名词单复数不一致，'a different feelings'应为'different feelings'，去掉冠词'a'。

× except for the condition of had a headache or another our house the issue.

✓ except when I have a headache or other issues at home.

介词和句子结构错误，'except for the condition of had a headache or another our house the issue'应改为'except when I have a headache or other issues at home'。

× I like wearing perfume everyday, just like a imaginal clothes in your spirit.

✓ I like wearing perfume every day, just like imaginary clothes for your spirit.

量词和拼写错误，'everyday'应为副词短语'every day'，'imaginal'应为'imaginary'，且表达更自然。

× I'm not anymore of all.

✓ I'm not like that anymore.

代词和句子结构错误，原句不通顺，应改为'I'm not like that anymore'。

× It gives me a sense of feeling good.

✓ It gives me a sense of feeling good.

此句语法正确，无需修改。

× To be honest, perfume is in a much more expensive than other gifts for me, so if I cannot buy a gift for my close friends or family numbers, yes I would spend that.

✓ To be honest, perfume is much more expensive than other gifts for me, so if I cannot buy a gift for my close friends or family members, yes I would spend that much.

介词和词汇错误，'in a much more expensive'应为'much more expensive'，'family numbers'应为'family members'，'spend that'应为'spend that much'。

× Was that such of money? Because it is a really good. Present. For lady, I mean.

✓ Is it worth spending such an amount of money? Because it is a really good present for a lady, I mean.

句子结构混乱，需调整为完整句子，'Was that such of money?'改为'Is it worth spending such an amount of money?'，并合并断句。

× Definitely yes. As for the brand there on selling website they often higher than another platform I or buy it from the Internet which is more cheaper than the.

✓ Definitely yes. As for the brand, the selling websites often have higher prices than other platforms. I usually buy it from the Internet, which is cheaper.

单复数和句子结构错误，'there on selling website'应为'the selling websites'，'more cheaper'为双重比较错误，应为'cheaper'，句子需重组使其通顺。