Perfume— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến ý không được truyền đạt tự nhiên và hiệu quả. Bạn nên tránh những câu không hoàn chỉnh và sử dụng từ vựng chính xác hơn để diễn đạt ý thích mùi hương nhẹ nhàng và cảm giác khi dùng nước hoa.

예시: Yes, I like perfume, but I prefer those with a light scent rather than heavy ones. I enjoy wearing perfumes that have a subtle fragrance because they make me feel elegant and confident.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không phù hợp, làm cho ý nghĩa không rõ ràng. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và giải thích rõ khi nào bạn dùng nước hoa.

예시: Actually, I don't use perfume every day. I usually wear it on special occasions, such as weddings or formal events, when I want to look my best.

제안: Bạn nên chú ý sử dụng thì đúng và cấu trúc câu chính xác hơn. Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng và mạch lạc, tránh lặp từ và dùng từ phù hợp để thể hiện ý định mua nước hoa làm quà tặng.

예시: It depends on how special the person is. If it's a close friend or a loved one, I would definitely buy perfume as a gift for them.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và câu không hoàn chỉnh, làm giảm tính tự nhiên và hiệu quả. Bạn nên sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, giải thích rõ lý do tại sao nước hoa đắt và dùng từ vựng phù hợp.

예시: Yes, perfumes are quite expensive, but I think it's justified because they go through many complex processes to create high-quality products for consumers.

× I don't like the perfume that had the heavy scent.

✓ I don't like the perfume that has the heavy scent.

The verb 'had' is in the past tense, but the sentence refers to a general preference, so the present tense 'has' should be used to agree with the subject 'perfume'. This is a verb tense consistency issue.

× I tend to be ferde lighter sent more because it has a fragrance and it makes me feel like a Princess.

✓ I tend to prefer lighter scents more because they have a fragrance and they make me feel like a princess.

The original sentence contains misspellings and incorrect word forms: 'ferde' should be 'prefer', 'sent' should be 'scents'. Also, 'it' should be 'they' to agree with the plural noun 'scents'. Capitalization of 'Princess' is unnecessary here.

× Actually no, I only use her feeling or some important.

✓ Actually no, I only use perfume for special occasions or important events.

The phrase 'her feeling' is incorrect and unclear. It seems the student meant 'perfume' or 'fragrance'. Also, 'some important' is incomplete; it should specify 'important occasions' or 'events'. Pronouns and nouns must be used correctly to convey meaning.

× Applications like going to attend to a wedding or going somewhere that I need to get dressed.

✓ For applications like attending a wedding or going somewhere where I need to dress up.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks a clear subject and verb. 'Going to attend to a wedding' is awkward; 'attending a wedding' is better. Also, 'going somewhere that I need to get dressed' is unclear; 'going somewhere where I need to dress up' is more natural.

× Well it may depends for how special the person was.

✓ Well, it may depend on how special the person is.

'May depends' is incorrect; modal verbs like 'may' should be followed by the base form 'depend'. Also, 'for how special the person was' should be 'on how special the person is' to correctly use the preposition and maintain present tense.

× If it's a friend of mine or my loved ones I will definitely will bought them as a gift.

✓ If it's a friend of mine or my loved ones, I will definitely buy them a gift.

'Will definitely will bought' is incorrect; 'will' should be used once followed by the base verb 'buy'. 'Bought' is past tense and should not be used after 'will'. Also, 'as a gift' can be simplified to 'a gift'.

× Perfume do expensive, but I think they have the rights to be expensive because they need to.

✓ Perfumes are expensive, but I think they have the right to be expensive because they need to.

'Perfume do expensive' is incorrect; 'perfume' is singular and should be 'Perfume is expensive' or plural 'Perfumes are expensive'. 'They have the rights' should be 'the right' (singular) to match the context.

× Went through a lot of steps to have the. Literally perfect. Products for. Consumer to use.

✓ They go through a lot of steps to produce literally perfect products for consumers to use.

The original sentences are fragmented and lack subjects and verbs. 'Went through' needs a subject, and 'products for consumer to use' should be 'products for consumers to use' with correct plural and article usage.