Perfume— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn có vẻ không tự nhiên và có một số lỗi từ vựng như 'nonsense' và 'frequencies' không phù hợp trong ngữ cảnh. Bạn nên sử dụng từ vựng chính xác và tránh lỗi phát âm hoặc chọn từ không đúng nghĩa để câu trả lời trở nên tự nhiên và hiệu quả hơn.

예시: Yes, I really like perfume because it makes me feel more confident and attractive. For example, when I wear a nice fragrance, it enhances my overall appearance and leaves a good impression on others. I also enjoy trying different scents depending on the occasion.

제안: Bạn nên tránh sử dụng các cụm từ không rõ nghĩa như 'take an AB interest' và nên diễn đạt câu trả lời một cách rõ ràng, mạch lạc hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời có tính liên kết cao hơn.

예시: Actually, I don't use perfume every day because I prefer my natural scent. However, I do wear perfume on special occasions like weddings or my loved ones' birthday parties.

제안: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi từ vựng và cấu trúc câu không rõ nghĩa như 'simple film' và 'spacious present'. Bạn nên sử dụng từ vựng chính xác và cấu trúc câu đơn giản, rõ ràng để truyền đạt ý tưởng hiệu quả hơn.

예시: Perfume is a thoughtful gift to show my appreciation and affection to my loved ones. In the future, I would carefully choose a bottle of fragrance that my parents would like, instead of usual gifts like flowers or birthday cakes.

제안: Bạn nên chú ý phát âm và chọn từ đúng như 'brands like Dior, Chanel' thay vì 'They are, Chanel'. Ngoài ra, từ 'sands' không phù hợp trong ngữ cảnh này. Hãy sử dụng từ vựng chính xác và câu trả lời có cấu trúc rõ ràng hơn.

예시: It depends on where you buy perfumes. Luxury brands like Dior or Chanel can be very expensive, costing a lot of money. However, you can find more affordable perfumes at local shops.

× For example, whenever I wear a nonsense, I think it elevates my overall appearance and leaves a good impression on others.

✓ For example, whenever I wear a perfume, I think it elevates my overall appearance and leaves a good impression on others.

The word 'nonsense' is incorrect in this context; the student likely meant 'perfume'. Using the correct noun is essential for clarity and meaning.

× I also enjoy trying different frequencies depending on the occasion.

✓ I also enjoy trying different fragrances depending on the occasion.

The word 'frequencies' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'fragrances' when referring to types of perfume scents.

× Actually no, because I prefer my natural scent in my daily life even though I take an AB interest in perfume.

✓ Actually no, because I prefer my natural scent in my daily life even though I have an interest in perfume.

The phrase 'take an AB interest' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'have an interest'. Also, 'AB' seems to be a typo or error.

× I just wear perfume whenever I have special occasions like weddings or birthday parties of my loved ones.

✓ I just wear perfume whenever I have special occasions like weddings or birthday parties of my loved ones.

The sentence is grammatically correct in terms of singular and plural usage here; no correction needed.

× A simple film is a spacious present to show my appreciation and affection to my loved ones.

✓ A simple perfume is a special present to show my appreciation and affection to my loved ones.

The word 'film' is incorrect; the student likely meant 'perfume'. Also, 'spacious' is not appropriate to describe a present; 'special' fits better.

× So perhaps in the future I would select it thoroughly and purchase a bottle of fragrance that my parents will enjoy apart from normal gifts like a bunch like bunches of flowers or birthday cakes.

✓ So perhaps in the future I would select it carefully and purchase a bottle of fragrance that my parents will enjoy apart from normal gifts like bunches of flowers or birthday cakes.

The phrase 'select it thoroughly' is awkward; 'select it carefully' is better. Also, 'a bunch like bunches' is redundant; 'bunches' alone is sufficient.

× It depends on where you buy them or will visit luxurious brands like They are, Chanel and so on.

✓ It depends on where you buy them; if you visit luxurious brands like Dior, Chanel, and so on,

The sentence is fragmented and contains errors like 'They are' which should be 'Dior'. The sentence needs restructuring for clarity.

× It will definitely cost us an arm and a leg to possess them.

✓ They will definitely cost an arm and a leg to buy.

Using 'us' and 'possess' is awkward here. 'They' refers to perfumes, and 'cost an arm and a leg' is an idiom meaning very expensive. 'Buy' is more natural than 'possess'.

× In contrast, it will be much more affordable to own our favorite sands when we go to a local shop.

✓ In contrast, it will be much more affordable to buy our favorite scents when we go to a local shop.

The word 'sands' is incorrect; the correct word is 'scents' when referring to perfume smells.