Perfume— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は質問に直接答えていますが、文が少し長くて冗長に感じられます。より自然で効果的な回答にするために、文を短くし、接続詞を適切に使い、具体的な理由や感想を加えると良いでしょう。

예시: Yes, I like perfume. I usually buy it once a month from a nearby store because they have a wide variety of pleasant scents. My favorite is a blue perfume that I often choose.

제안: 回答は明確で内容も具体的ですが、接続詞の使い方を工夫して、より自然で流暢な表現にすると良いでしょう。また、「spicy」という表現の説明を少し加えると理解しやすくなります。

예시: Yes, I use perfume daily and usually change it depending on the situation. For instance, when I go to school, I prefer a spicy scent because it helps me concentrate on studying.

제안: 回答は具体的で良いですが、「blue expensive perfume」という表現は少し不自然です。形容詞の順序や表現を見直し、より自然な英語にすると良いでしょう。

예시: Yes, I often buy perfume as a gift. For example, about a year ago, I bought an expensive blue perfume for my girlfriend's birthday.

제안: 回答は内容が少し不明瞭で、文法的な誤りもあります。より具体的で明確な説明を心がけ、文法や語順にも注意しましょう。

예시: Yes, I think perfumes are quite expensive. For example, I spend about ¥1000 each month on them. Also, I have to work hard to afford the more expensive ones.

× For example, it cost for me about ¥1000 a month if I use perfumes.

✓ For example, it costs me about ¥1000 a month if I use perfumes.

The pronoun 'it' is used incorrectly here. The sentence intends to express the cost to the speaker, so 'it costs me' is the correct phrase. Also, 'cost' should be in the third person singular present tense 'costs' to agree with the subject 'it'.

× For example, it cost for me about ¥1000 a month if I use perfumes.

✓ For example, it costs me about ¥1000 a month if I use perfumes.

The verb 'cost' should be in the third person singular present tense 'costs' to agree with the singular subject 'it'.

× For example, it cost for me about ¥1000 a month if I use perfumes.

✓ For example, it costs me about ¥1000 a month if I use perfumes.

The preposition 'for' is unnecessary after 'cost' in this context. The correct expression is 'costs me' without 'for'.

× Additionally, in order to use expensive perfumes, I had to work for a long time.

✓ Additionally, in order to use expensive perfumes, I have had to work for a long time.

Since the context implies a continuing or recent experience, the present perfect tense 'have had to' is more appropriate than the simple past 'had to'.

× For example, I often buy perfume about once a month in a store near my house, because this store has a lot of perfume which smell good, and I often buy a blue perfume.

✓ For example, I often buy perfume about once a month in a store near my house, because this store has a lot of perfumes which smell good, and I often buy a blue perfume.

The pronoun 'which' refers to 'perfume' but 'perfume' is uncountable here. To refer to multiple items, 'perfumes' (plural) should be used, and 'which' correctly refers to them.