Perfume— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer needs to be clearer and more natural. Avoid grammatical errors and redundancy. Also, explain why you like the perfume and avoid confusing statements like 'especially for children' unless you clarify. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I really like perfume because it makes me feel more comfortable and relaxed. My favourite scent is rose, as it has a fresh and pleasant aroma. Additionally, rose perfumes are usually affordable, which is great for students like me.

제안: Your answer contains unclear phrases and grammatical mistakes. Make sure to use correct vocabulary ('full films' and 'premium' seem incorrect here). Keep your sentences concise and directly related to the question. Use linking words to explain reasons or effects.

예시: Yes, I use perfume every day because it helps me feel confident and fresh before going to school. Sometimes, I share my perfume with my friends, and they really enjoy the scent.

제안: Your answer is generally clear but could be improved by correcting grammar and sentence structure. Also, clarify your ideas and use linking words to connect your points logically.

예시: No, I usually don't buy perfume as a gift because I am a student and don't have enough money. However, on special occasions, my parents sometimes give me perfume as a present.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to express your opinion clearly and support it with reasons. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

예시: I think the price of perfume depends on the brand and type. Some perfumes are expensive, but there are also many affordable options, which is convenient for young people like me.

× Definitely, I love perfume because it has me more comfortable, convenient, and make me reduce the stress.

✓ Definitely, I love perfume because it makes me more comfortable, convenient, and helps me reduce stress.

The verb 'has' is incorrectly used here; the correct verb is 'makes' to express causing a state. Also, 'make' should be 'helps me' to correctly link the action of reducing stress. The verbs need to be in the correct form to match the subject and meaning.

× The favorite perfume I like the most is Rose because it's very affordable, especially for children.

✓ My favourite perfume is Rose because it's very affordable, especially for young people.

The phrase 'The favorite perfume I like the most' is redundant; 'My favourite perfume' is clearer. Also, 'children' is less appropriate here; 'young people' fits better for perfume affordability. 'Favourite' is the British English spelling.

× Absolutely, I always use full films in my daily life because it's have me more confident and fresh before going to school and sometimes I shares my premium with my friends and they feel very over the moon and.

✓ Absolutely, I always use perfume in my daily life because it makes me more confident and fresh before going to school, and sometimes I share my perfume with my friends, and they feel very happy.

'Full films' is incorrect; likely intended 'perfume'. 'It's have me' should be 'it makes me' for correct verb usage. 'I shares' should be 'I share' to agree with the subject. 'Premium' is incorrect here; 'perfume' is correct. 'Feel very over the moon and' is incomplete; 'feel very happy' is clearer.

× Of course not. I never buy perfumes as a gift because I'm currently a student at Daji High School. Then I don't have enough money to buy this. But in a large occasion my parent will give me a permit as a gift.

✓ Of course not. I never buy perfumes as gifts because I'm currently a student at Daji High School, so I don't have enough money to buy them. But on special occasions, my parents give me perfume as a gift.

'Then' is incorrectly used; 'so' is better to show cause and effect. 'A large occasion' should be 'special occasions'. 'My parent' should be plural 'my parents'. 'Permit' is incorrect; 'perfume' is intended. 'Will give' can be simplified to 'give' for habitual action.

× In my opinion I think price of perfume is depend on type and brand because it recently is have a many affordable. For young people, which is very convenient.

✓ In my opinion, the price of perfume depends on the type and brand because there are many affordable options recently. For young people, this is very convenient.

'Price of perfume is depend' should be 'price of perfume depends' for subject-verb agreement. 'It recently is have a many affordable' is incorrect; 'there are many affordable options recently' is correct. 'Which is very convenient' is a fragment; 'this is very convenient' completes the sentence.