Perfume— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答中表达了观点，但句子结构稍显复杂且有语法错误，建议简化句子结构，避免重复表达，并使用更自然的表达方式。

예시: Yes, I like perfume because it reflects a person's personality. Also, wearing perfume makes my outfit more pleasant to others.

제안: 回答内容清晰，但有语法错误和表达不够自然，建议注意单复数和冠词的使用，并用连接词使句子更流畅。

예시: Yes, I use perfume every day because it makes me feel more confident in social situations, and as a result, my mood improves throughout the day.

제안: 回答中有重复和语法错误，表达不够简洁自然。建议避免重复，使用更准确的词汇，并用连接词使句子更连贯。

예시: Yes, buying perfume as a gift is very popular among young people in my country. Therefore, I would choose perfume as a gift, although it can be challenging to pick one that my friends will like.

제안: 回答表达了观点，但品牌名称拼写错误且句子结构稍显复杂。建议注意品牌名称的正确拼写，简化句子结构，并使用连接词使表达更自然。

예시: Yes, I think perfumes are quite expensive for me since I am a full-time student, especially big brands like Dior and Armani. However, I am willing to save money to buy the perfume I like, even if it costs a lot.

× I think perfume is a symbol of a person's characteristic and with a perfume our outfit will be more comfortable to others.

✓ I think perfume is a symbol of a person's characteristic and with perfume our outfit will be more comfortable to others.

这里的“a perfume”使用了不正确的冠词，perfume作为不可数名词时不需要冠词。建议去掉“a”。

× when I use perfume I feel more confident in social situation and my feeling will be better throughout the day.

✓ when I use perfume I feel more confident in social situations and my feeling will be better throughout the day.

“social situation”应为复数形式“social situations”，因为这里指的是一般的社交场合，不是特指一个场合。

× Yes, As for the young, in my country, buying a buying perfume as a gift is very popular.

✓ Yes, as for the young, in my country, buying perfume as a gift is very popular.

句子中出现了重复的“buying a buying”，属于句子结构错误，应删除多余部分。

× But it is challenging to choose the right perfume that my friends like.

✓ But it is challenging to choose the right perfume that my friends like.

该句无明显单复数错误，保持原句。

× especially the big brands like Dio Armani.

✓ especially big brands like Dior and Armani.

品牌名称拼写错误，应为“Dior and Armani”，且“the big brands”前的冠词“the”可省略，且品牌间应使用“and”连接。