Perfume— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it could be more natural and less repetitive. Instead of repeating "perfume" twice, try to use synonyms or pronouns. Also, adding a bit more detail about why you like the fragrance would improve your response.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy wearing perfume because its pleasant fragrance can boost my mood and confidence throughout the day.

제안: Your answer directly addresses the question and provides a reason, which is good. However, the sentence could be more natural by removing unnecessary articles and improving phrasing. Also, linking the two ideas more smoothly would help coherence.

예시: I don't wear perfume daily because my job doesn't permit it; however, I like to wear it when I go on dates with my boyfriend.

제안: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Avoid starting sentences with 'Like' in this context. Also, use the correct past tense and articles. Adding linking words would improve flow.

예시: Of course, I would buy perfume as a gift. For example, I sent a bottle of perfume to my boyfriend during last summer vacation.

제안: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Try to use plural forms correctly and avoid redundancy. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and provide clearer comparisons.

예시: Yes, perfumes from famous brands are usually very expensive; however, there are alternative brands that are more affordable.

× I don't use the perfume in my daily life because my job doesn't allow me to use perfume, but I will use perfume when I date with my boyfriend.

✓ I don't use perfume in my daily life because my job doesn't allow me to use perfume, but I will use perfume when I date my boyfriend.

The definite article 'the' is incorrectly used before 'perfume' when speaking generally. In English, when referring to something in a general sense, we usually omit the article. Also, 'date with my boyfriend' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'date my boyfriend' without 'with'.

× Like in last summer vacation I send a perfume to my boyfriend.

✓ Like in last summer vacation I sent a perfume to my boyfriend.

The verb 'send' should be in the past tense 'sent' to match the past time reference 'last summer vacation'. Using the present tense here is incorrect.

× Yes, the most famous brand is the perfume is very expensive, but there are also some alternative brand which is cost not so high.

✓ Yes, the most famous perfume brands are very expensive, but there are also some alternative brands which do not cost so much.

There is a singular/plural mismatch. 'Brand' should be plural 'brands' to agree with 'some alternative'. Also, 'which is cost not so high' is incorrect; it should be 'which do not cost so much' to correctly express the idea. Additionally, 'the most famous brand is the perfume' is awkward; it is better to say 'the most famous perfume brands'. This correction addresses singular/plural agreement and improves clarity.