Perfume— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn có vẻ tự nhiên nhưng có nhiều từ lặp lại và một số lỗi ngữ pháp nhỏ. Bạn nên tránh sử dụng các từ như "uh" và cố gắng sử dụng các từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy chú ý đến việc sử dụng từ vựng chính xác hơn (ví dụ: "muscle" nên là "musk").

예시: Yes, I really enjoy wearing perfume, especially those with light and fresh scents. I prefer fruity or slightly sweet fragrances, but I usually avoid strong scents or those with musky or woody notes.

제안: Bạn nên cấu trúc câu rõ ràng hơn và tránh lặp từ. Sử dụng các từ nối như "usually", "but", "when" để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Ngoài ra, câu cuối bị bỏ dở, bạn nên hoàn thiện ý tưởng để câu trả lời đầy đủ và rõ ràng.

예시: Yes, I usually wear perfume every day, especially fresh scents when I go to school. However, when I attend parties or hang out with friends, I prefer to use my favorite perfume because it boosts my confidence and makes me feel special.

제안: Bạn nên tránh lặp từ và sử dụng cấu trúc câu chính xác hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy dùng các từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Ví dụ, thay vì nói "it was so expensive", nên dùng "it is quite expensive" để phù hợp với thì hiện tại.

예시: Not really. I wouldn't buy perfume as a gift because everyone has their own personality and favorite scents. Also, perfumes can be quite expensive, so they might not fit within our budget.

제안: Bạn nên chú ý đến ngữ pháp số nhiều và chia động từ cho đúng (ví dụ: "perfumes are" thay vì "perfume are"). Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng từ vựng chính xác hơn như "earthy scent" thay vì "earth sense" và dùng các từ nối để câu trả lời rõ ràng hơn.

예시: Yes, I think perfumes are expensive, especially those from high-end or popular brands. However, you can also find nice perfumes with earthy scents from mid-range brands that suit your preferences.

× I like wearing perfume, especially when it has a light or fresh sense.

✓ I like wearing perfume, especially when it has a light or fresh scent.

The word 'sense' is incorrect in this context; the correct noun to describe fragrance is 'scent'. This is a vocabulary choice rather than a grammar error, but it affects clarity.

× I would like to choose a perfume, uh, with a fruity stance or it has a little bit sweet, uh, but I avoid to choose a perfume that has a strong or has a muscle or the wooden notes.

✓ I would like to choose a perfume with a fruity scent or one that is a little bit sweet, but I avoid choosing a perfume that has strong musk or woody notes.

The phrase 'avoid to choose' is incorrect; the verb 'avoid' should be followed by a gerund ('choosing'). Also, 'stance' should be 'scent', and 'muscle' is a mispronunciation or misspelling of 'musk'. Prepositions and verb forms need correction for grammatical accuracy.

× Yes, I usually use perfume in my daily life when I go to school or for everyday I usually use the like all the fresh scents but when I go to the party or hang out with my friend I usually use my favorite perfume to boost my confidence or it make me feel that I.

✓ Yes, I usually use perfume in my daily life when I go to school. Every day, I usually use fresh scents, but when I go to a party or hang out with my friends, I usually use my favorite perfume to boost my confidence or make me feel good.

The sentence has multiple issues: 'for everyday' should be 'every day'; 'the like all the fresh scents' is unclear and corrected to 'fresh scents'; 'the party' should be 'a party'; 'friend' should be plural 'friends'; 'it make me feel that I' is incomplete and corrected to 'make me feel good'. Prepositions and article usage are corrected for clarity and grammar.

× Not really, I think I would not buy perfume as a gift because any person has their own personality and has their own favorite sense.

✓ Not really, I think I would not buy perfume as a gift because everyone has their own personality and favorite scent.

The phrase 'any person' is better replaced with 'everyone' for naturalness. Also, 'favorite sense' should be 'favorite scent'. The modal verb 'would not' is correctly used here to express conditional preference.

× So I think perfume is not is not a good option as a gift and it was so expensive and it not fit our budget.

✓ So I think perfume is not a good option as a gift because it is very expensive and does not fit our budget.

The sentence has redundancy ('is not is not') and incorrect verb forms ('was' should be 'is' to match present tense; 'it not fit' should be 'does not fit'). Pronoun and verb agreement are corrected for grammatical accuracy.

× Yes I think perfume are expensive especially when it come from a high end or the high end brands or the popular ones.

✓ Yes, I think perfumes are expensive, especially when they come from high-end or popular brands.

'Perfume' should be plural 'perfumes' to agree with 'are'; 'it come' should be 'they come' to agree with plural subject. Also, 'high end' should be hyphenated as 'high-end'. Subject-verb agreement and pluralization are corrected.

× But you can also choose the nice one with earth sense that suit with you or your favorite from the mid band.

✓ But you can also choose a nice one with an earthy scent that suits you or your favorite from a mid-range brand.

'Earth sense' should be 'earthy scent'; 'suit with you' should be 'suits you'; 'the mid band' is unclear and corrected to 'a mid-range brand'. Prepositions and adjective forms are corrected for natural and grammatical English.