Perfume— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to avoid repetition and filler words like 'uh'. Use clear and correct vocabulary, for example, say 'perfume' instead of 'perform'. Also, structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details without repeating the same idea.

예시: Yes, I like perfume because it refreshes me when I go outside. The scent is pleasant and helps mask any body odor, which makes me feel more confident when I go to work.

제안: Be careful with word choice; 'parking' is incorrect here. Also, avoid filler words and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas and explain why you choose a particular scent.

예시: Yes, I use perfume daily when I go to university or work. I prefer a subtle scent rather than a strong one because it makes me feel confident throughout the day.

제안: Avoid repeating words unnecessarily and ensure your sentences are complete. Use linking words to explain your reasons clearly. Also, use correct vocabulary, for example, 'scent' instead of 'science'.

예시: Yes, I often buy perfume as a gift. Last month, I gave a perfume to my friend because he likes good scents.

제안: Try to speak clearly without filler words and avoid repeating words. Use linking words to organize your ideas logically. Also, explain your opinion with specific reasons or examples.

예시: Yes, perfumes can be expensive because they contain various fragrances. However, I think the price is reasonable considering their quality and value.

× Yes, I like perform because it gives me a refreshment when I go outside and the same uh, the scent of perfume is amazing because it uh, decrease my uh, decrease my uh body scent and give a fresh mind when I go go to work.

✓ Yes, I like perfume because it gives me refreshment when I go outside and the same, uh, the scent of perfume is amazing because it, uh, decreases my, uh, body scent and gives a fresh mind when I go to work.

The verb 'perform' is incorrect; it should be 'perfume' (noun). Also, 'decrease' and 'give' need to be in third person singular form 'decreases' and 'gives' to agree with the singular subject 'the scent'. Repetition of 'go' is an error and should be corrected to a single 'go'. These corrections ensure subject-verb agreement and correct word usage.

× Yes, I use parking in my daily life when I go to university or when I go to work, I, I always use perfume and I choose uh, perfume scent is a very uh, small scent, not a light scent.

✓ Yes, I use perfume in my daily life when I go to university or when I go to work. I always use perfume and I choose a perfume scent that is very subtle, not a light scent.

The word 'parking' is incorrect; it should be 'perfume'. The phrase 'perfume scent is a very small scent' is awkward; 'a perfume scent that is very subtle' is clearer. Also, the sentence structure is improved by splitting into two sentences for clarity.

× It used to make me very uh, confidence when I go to 1.

✓ It makes me very confident when I go out.

The phrase 'used to make me very confidence' is incorrect; 'confidence' is a noun, but the adjective 'confident' is needed here. Also, 'when I go to 1' is unclear; likely intended 'when I go out'. The verb tense is corrected to present simple to match habitual action.

× Yeah, I always buy perfume, perfume as a gift. In the last month, I provide my I provide a perfume for my gift, perfume for my friend as a gift because he this is very good science.

✓ Yeah, I always buy perfume as a gift. Last month, I gave a perfume as a gift to my friend because it has a very good scent.

The verb 'provide' is incorrect in past tense context; 'gave' is appropriate. The phrase 'he this is very good science' is unclear and likely meant 'it has a very good scent'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correct tense usage.

× Yeah, sometimes it uh, feels that perfumes are more expensive, uh, because uh, the, the fragrance are, there are lots of different, different fragrance in perfume uh whole, Sometimes it uh, it is very costly, but manageable. It is very uh, value.

✓ Yeah, sometimes it feels that perfumes are expensive because there are lots of different fragrances in perfume. Sometimes it is very costly but manageable. It is very valuable.

The phrase 'the fragrance are' is incorrect; 'fragrance' should be plural 'fragrances' to agree with 'lots of different'. 'Value' is a noun; 'valuable' is the correct adjective here. The sentence is rephrased for clarity and grammatical correctness.