Teacher— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., “when I was in my high school” repeated) and correct small errors ("tell us joke" → "telling jokes"). Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., "creative methods" instead of "special methods").

예시: My favourite teacher was my high school biology teacher. She was young and easygoing, and she used creative methods to help us learn, such as telling jokes and using hands-on experiments. Because of her approach, I found the subject much more interesting and easier to remember.

제안: Give a clear timeline and avoid small inaccuracies (primary school teacher vs help in high school). Start with a direct answer, then explain exactly how and why you keep in touch, and provide a specific example of help she gave. Use linking words (e.g., “because,” “for example”) to make it coherent.

예시: Yes, I still keep in touch with my primary school Chinese teacher. She continued to support me into high school; for example, she encouraged me to speak up in class and praised small improvements, which gradually made me more confident. Because of her ongoing support, I still email her occasionally to update her on my studies.

제안: Answer directly, then give specific examples and use correct tense and linking words. Replace vague phrases like "related knowledge" and "a lot of praise" with concrete actions (e.g., "gave constructive feedback," "assigned group projects"). Keep it within 3–4 sentences and ensure grammatical accuracy.

예시: She taught the curriculum clearly and also boosted my confidence by giving constructive feedback and organising small group presentations. For instance, she praised my answers in class and encouraged me to lead a group project, which helped me become more outgoing and confident.

제안: Provide a concise direct answer followed by two clear reasons with linking words. Correct grammar ("manage the student" → "manage students") and avoid vague statements like "it is even not enough"; be specific (e.g., "a postgraduate degree may still not guarantee a position in big cities"). Aim for clearer sentence structure and use vocabulary like "challenging" or "demanding."

예시: No, I don't want to be a teacher in the future. Firstly, the profession is very competitive in China and even a postgraduate degree may not guarantee a position in large cities. Secondly, managing students and handling classroom discipline seems very challenging for me, so I prefer a different career path.

× She was an easygoing and young woman.

✓ She was an easygoing, young woman.

A list of adjectives modifying a noun should be separated by commas when both adjectives independently describe the noun. Adding a comma between 'easygoing' and 'young' clarifies they are coordinate adjectives. If they are not coordinate (one modifies the adjective), no comma would be used, but here both equally describe 'woman'. Suggestion: Use a comma between coordinate adjectives: 'an easygoing, young woman.'

× She always used some special methods to let us remember the knowledge, such as tell us joke.

✓ She always used special methods to help us remember the material, such as telling us jokes.

After 'such as' examples should be in a parallel, grammatically correct form. 'Tell us joke' is ungrammatical: 'tell' should be the -ing form 'telling' to match the gerund phrase, and 'joke' needs plural or article. Also 'remember the knowledge' is awkward; use 'remember the material'. Suggestion: Use gerund after 'such as' and correct noun number: 'such as telling us jokes.'

× Are you still in touch with your primary school teacher?

✓ Are you still in touch with your primary school teacher?

No grammatical error detected in this sentence. It correctly uses present tense to ask about a current state. No change needed.

× Yes, I still keep in touch with my Chinese teacher.

✓ Yes, I still keep in touch with my Chinese teacher.

The sentence is grammatical: present simple 'keep in touch' correctly expresses an ongoing habitual action. No change needed.

× She was very kind and helped me a lot when I was in my high school.

✓ She was very kind and helped me a lot when I was in high school.

The phrase 'in my high school' is nonstandard in English; we normally say 'in high school' without the possessive. Removing 'my' makes the phrase idiomatic. Suggestion: Use 'in high school' to refer to that period of education.

× At that time, I was very introverted.

✓ At that time, I was very introverted.

This sentence is grammatical and appropriate to the context. No change needed.

× She helped me to be more confident and it really benefited me a lot.

✓ She helped me become more confident, and it benefited me a lot.

'Helped me to be' is acceptable but more natural is 'helped me become'. Also 'really benefited me a lot' is redundant: 'really' and 'a lot' both intensify 'benefited.' Use one: 'benefited me a lot.' Add a comma before 'and' to join independent clauses. Suggestion: Use concise phrasing: 'She helped me become more confident, and it benefited me a lot.'

× When I was in my high school, my biology teacher not only taught us the related knowledge but also gave me a lot of praise and encouragement so that time I can build up confidence and be more outgoing.

✓ When I was in high school, my biology teacher not only taught us the related material but also gave me a lot of praise and encouragement so that I could build up confidence and become more outgoing.

Use 'in high school' (idiomatic). 'Knowledge' is better as 'material' or 'subject matter.' The clause 'so that time I can build up' has tense and word-order errors: 'so that' should be followed by a clause with appropriate past tense/modal for result in the past: 'I could build up.' Also use 'become more outgoing' instead of 'be more outgoing' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: Keep consistent past tense for past events and use correct word order: 'so that I could build up confidence and become more outgoing.'

× Actually, I don't want to be a teacher in the future.

✓ Actually, I don't want to be a teacher in the future.

This sentence is grammatical: 'don't want to' correctly expresses desire about the future. No change needed.

× In China it is very competitive.

✓ In China, it is very competitive to become a teacher.

As written, 'In China it is very competitive' is vague and lacks an explicit subject or context. Adding 'to become a teacher' clarifies what is competitive. Also add a comma after the introductory phrase 'In China.' Suggestion: Specify what is competitive: 'In China, it is very competitive to become a teacher.'

× To be a teacher you need to complete your post graduate degree.

✓ To be a teacher, you need to complete your postgraduate degree.

Use 'postgraduate' as a single compound adjective; no space. Also add a comma after the introductory infinitive clause. Depending on meaning, 'a postgraduate degree' or 'your postgraduate degree' can be used; 'your' is okay if speaking to the listener, but 'a' is more general. Here 'a postgraduate degree' is more natural. Suggestion: 'To be a teacher, you need to complete a postgraduate degree.'

× Especially in some big city it is even not enough.

✓ Especially in some big cities, this is still not enough.

Pluralize 'city' to 'cities' to match 'some.' Add a comma after the introductory phrase. 'Even not enough' is unidiomatic; use 'still not enough' or 'not sufficient.' Replace vague 'it' with 'this' referring to the degree requirement. Suggestion: 'Especially in some big cities, this is still not enough.'

× And I think manage the student is very hard for me.

✓ And I think managing students is very hard for me.

After verbs like 'think' when commenting on an action, use the gerund 'managing.' 'Student' should be plural 'students' to indicate the group. Also combine into one sentence or replace 'And' with 'I also' for formality. Suggestion: 'I also think managing students is very difficult for me.'