Teacher— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clearer and more natural: start with a concise topic sentence naming the teacher, then give 1–2 specific supporting details. Correct grammar (tenses, articles, pronouns) and avoid redundant phrases. Use linking words (for example, because, so) to connect ideas.

예시: Yes — my favourite teacher is my high school science teacher. She made lessons fun by using experiments and real-life examples, so I enjoyed learning complex topics. Because she was patient and encouraging, I felt confident asking questions during class.

제안: Organize your response: begin with a clear statement about whether you are still in touch, then add concise details (how you keep contact and how often). Use correct sentence structure and linking words (however, although, so) to improve coherence.

예시: I am still in touch with one of my primary school teachers, my favourite science teacher. Although we don't talk every day, we are connected on Facebook and occasionally comment on each other's posts, so I can keep up with her updates.

제안: Be specific and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence describing the main ways she helped you, then provide 2–3 concrete examples (academic help, personal guidance, study methods). Use linking words (for example, for instance, besides) and correct word choice (discipline, manage time).

예시: My favourite science teacher helped me both academically and personally. For example, she explained difficult concepts with clear demonstrations and gave practical study techniques for managing my time. Besides academics, she taught us discipline and encouraged us to develop good habits and confidence.

제안: Clarify and refine your ideas: give a direct yes/no, then explain why with 1–2 specific reasons. Avoid unclear metaphors (e.g., 'strong journal') and use precise vocabulary (influence, shape, support). Keep sentences concise and logical with linking words (because, so, therefore).

예시: Yes, I would like to be a teacher in the future because teaching can shape a child's outlook and help them develop important skills. For instance, by teaching critical thinking and empathy, I could support children to fit better into society and reach their potential.

× Yes I do have my favorite teacher.

✓ Yes, I have a favorite teacher.

Unnecessary use of auxiliary 'do' with stative verb 'have' is incorrect in this context; remove 'do' and add a comma after 'Yes' for natural speech pacing.

× See teacher is science and C makes classroom fun and a learning friendly and I love her so much.

✓ My teacher is the science teacher; she makes the classroom fun and friendly, and I love her so much.

Original sentence has missing articles and pronouns and incorrect word order. Add 'the' before 'science teacher', replace 'See' with 'My' and 'C' with 'she', use 'friendly' not 'learning friendly', and split clauses with proper punctuation.

× Barely remember my primary school teachers but I think I'm connected with one of my teacher that my favorite teacher.

✓ I barely remember my primary school teachers, but I think I'm connected with one of my teachers who was my favorite.

Subject-verb and noun number mismatches: 'one of my teacher' should be 'one of my teachers'. Also add pronoun 'who' and past-tense 'was' if referring to past role.

× Science teacher in Facebook.

✓ She is my science teacher on Facebook.

Fragment lacking subject and verb. Make a full sentence with subject 'She' and verb 'is' and clarify relationship 'on Facebook'.

× I don't talk daily but we are in touch.

✓ I don't talk to her daily, but we keep in touch.

Missing preposition 'to' after 'talk'; 'keep in touch' is a more natural present-tense expression for ongoing contact.

× I see her post on Facebook and other social media.

✓ I see her posts on Facebook and other social media.

Plural needed: 'post' should be 'posts' to agree with habitual present-tense observation.

× My favorite science teacher has helped has helped me in everywhere.

✓ My favorite science teacher has helped me everywhere.

Duplicate phrase 'has helped' and incorrect preposition 'in everywhere'. Remove the repetition and use 'everywhere' without 'in'.

× Safety teaches us in a friendly manner and she teaches us disciplinary subjects, how to be a good person and how to manage, how to encourage and study.

✓ She teaches us safety in a friendly manner, disciplinary subjects, how to be a good person, how to manage, how to stay motivated, and how to study.

Sentence needed reordering and clearer nouns. 'Safety teaches us' is incorrect; teacher teaches safety. Replaced awkward phrases ('how to encourage') with 'how to stay motivated' for clarity and parallelism; added commas and 'and' for list structure.

× Yes, I do. I think teacher is a profession that changes the perspective of a child and it is very strong journal to save the early child's mind and make them able to fit in the world so.

✓ Yes, I do. I think teaching is a profession that changes a child's perspective; it plays a strong role in shaping a young child's mind and helping them fit into the world.

Use gerund 'teaching' as the name of the profession, not 'teacher'. Use articles correctly ('a child's'). Replace 'strong journal' with 'strong role' and rephrase unidiomatic parts for clarity and correct verb forms.