Teamwork— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you like teamwork, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and correct basic grammar (articles, plural forms, word order). Use phrases like “I enjoy teamwork because…” and link with “for example” or “however.”

예시: I enjoy working in a team because it helps me learn from others and improve my communication skills. For example, collaborating with colleagues from different cultures taught me how to explain ideas more clearly. However, I sometimes dislike intense debates within a team because they can become unproductive.

제안: Give a clear, compact answer: start with a direct confirmation, then add concise, specific details about the project, your role, and what you learned. Use correct article usage and smoother linking phrases like “for our final project” and “I worked with a student called…”

예시: Yes, I have. In my final semester in Montreal, our professor assigned a group project for our computing diploma. I worked with a student named Kamal, who was very knowledgeable, and I felt comfortable collaborating with him. I enjoyed the experience because we divided tasks evenly and learned from each other.

제안: Structure your answer: state one main learning point in a topic sentence, then expand with a specific example and linkers. Fix grammar (tenses, articles) and avoid vague phrases. Use concrete details like how discussion or role rotation improved your skills.

예시: I learned that teamwork means sharing responsibility and giving everyone an equal chance to speak. For example, in one project we rotated roles so everyone presented ideas, which helped me respect different opinions. I also improved my cross-cultural communication by explaining technical ideas in simpler English so everyone could follow.

제안: Be concise and finish your thought: answer directly with one or two dislikes, give a specific example, and use linking words like “first” and “also.” Correct grammar and vocabulary (e.g., “bossy,” “respect others’ opinions”). Avoid trailing off—complete your sentences.

예시: I dislike when some team members act bossy and insist on doing things only their way. For example, in one group a member refused to consider others’ suggestions, which slowed progress and lowered morale. Also, unclear task division can cause duplication of work and frustration.

× I enjoy teamwork sometimes by doing this I believe that I can get knowledge and can build a strong communication skills with different cultures people.

✓ I sometimes enjoy teamwork because I believe it helps me gain knowledge and build strong communication skills with people from different cultures.

Incorrect use of present participle phrase and word order. 'By doing this' is awkward; 'because' better connects clause. 'Can get knowledge' -> 'helps me gain knowledge' is natural. 'A strong communication skills' mixes singular article with plural noun; remove 'a' and use 'skills'. 'Different cultures people' should be 'people from different cultures'. Improve fluency and correct noun phrase and participle usage.

× Overall, I work in a team at so at work sometime there are some time there is a debate situation which I never prefer.

✓ Overall, I work in a team at work, and sometimes there are debates, which I do not prefer.

Redundant and incorrectly ordered phrases: 'at so at work' and repeated 'some time there are some time'. Use 'at work' alone. 'There is a debate situation' should be plural 'there are debates' for general situations. Use 'do not prefer' instead of 'never prefer' for natural negative preference. Fix sentence structure and punctuation.

× Yes. When I was pursuing A computing sport diploma in Montreal in our last semester, our professor gave us a group of project which was the final assessment.

✓ Yes. When I was pursuing a computing diploma in Montreal in my final semester, our professor gave us a group project as the final assessment.

Capitalization and article errors: 'A computing sport diploma' is incorrect and unclear; likely 'a computing diploma' or 'a computer studies diploma'. 'Our last semester' -> 'my final semester' since speaker refers to personal experience. 'Gave us a group of project' should be 'gave us a group project' or 'a group of projects' depending on meaning. Use past tense consistently; 'gave' is fine. Fix articles and noun phrases.

× I was in a team with a boy who named Kamal.

✓ I was in a team with a boy who was named Kamal.

Missing verb in relative clause: 'who named Kamal' suggests Kamal named someone. Use 'who was named Kamal' or more naturally 'a boy named Kamal'. This corrects pronoun/relative clause structure.

× He was very intelligent and I was comfortable with him.

✓ He was very intelligent, and I felt comfortable with him.

Mix of verbs: 'was comfortable with him' is understandable but 'felt comfortable' is more natural for expressing personal feeling. Both are past tense; change improves collocation. This addresses verb choice and natural phrasing.

× To begin with, the first thing that I would learn is the real meaning of equality in a team.

✓ To begin with, the first thing that I learned was the real meaning of equality in a team.

Tense mismatch: speaker recounting past experience should use past tense 'learned' and 'was' instead of conditional 'would learn' and present 'is'. Use past tense for completed learning.

× You will get equal chance to put your point of view.

✓ You will get an equal chance to put forward your point of view.

Missing article 'an' before 'equal chance' and missing preposition 'forward' for the phrase 'put forward your point of view'. Ensure correct collocation and article usage.

× On the other side, you will definitely get to know the people with the different cultures and their and improve your communication skills by using different language.

✓ On the other hand, you will definitely get to know people from different cultures and improve your communication skills by using different languages.

Wrong phrase 'On the other side' -> 'On the other hand'. 'the people with the different cultures' -> 'people from different cultures'. Remove stray 'their and'. 'different language' should be plural 'different languages' unless referring to a specific language. Fix adjective/adverb collocations.

× It would be several things that I don't prefer like in teamwork.

✓ There are several things I do not prefer about teamwork.

Awkward structure 'It would be several things that I don't prefer like in teamwork.' Use 'There are several things I do not prefer about teamwork.' This fixes subject-verb and word order to express general dislike.

× First of all, some people become bossy in the teamwork.

✓ First of all, some people become bossy when working in a team.

Article and phrase choice: 'in the teamwork' is unnatural. Use 'when working in a team' or 'in teamwork' without 'the'. Improves adverbial phrase placement.

× They always want to do the work according to their way.

✓ They always want to do the work their own way.

Awkward phrase 'according to their way'. Use idiomatic 'their own way'. This corrects pronoun + noun collocation.

× They should definitely respect others opinion too on the.

✓ They should definitely respect others' opinions too.

Missing possessive apostrophe in 'others' and plural 'opinions'. Remove extraneous 'on the'. Use 'others' opinions' to show possession.