Teamwork— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and start with a direct topic sentence that answers the question, then give one or two brief supporting reasons. Avoid negative-sounding absolutes and unnecessary filler. Use a linking word to connect your reason.

예시: Not really — I prefer working alone because I'm an introvert and focus better by myself. However, I understand teamwork is essential in a company, so I try to contribute by taking on clear, individual tasks within the group.

제안: Good structure and relevant detail. To improve, be slightly more specific about an example (one project or step) and use a linking phrase to show sequence or result.

예시: Yes, I have worked with other engineers many times, particularly on complex projects. For example, on a recent firmware project we divided the work into design, coding, and testing phases, which helped us finish two weeks ahead of schedule.

제안: Clarify and correct phrasing; remove hesitations and be specific about the skills you gained. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then list one or two concrete skills with brief examples or outcomes. Use linking words for clarity.

예시: Working in a team has taught me important professional and interpersonal skills. For instance, I learned to adapt to different working styles and to resolve conflicts diplomatically, which improved our productivity and kept projects on track.

제안: Good content and clear idea. Improve by making the first sentence a direct response and tightening language; give one specific consequence and, if possible, a short suggestion for handling it.

예시: One downside is that outspoken team members can dominate decisions, which sometimes means quieter people’s ideas are overlooked. To avoid this, I try to raise my points clearly in meetings and suggest a short round where everyone shares one idea.

× I don't like teamwork, but whether I like it or not, it's part of the corporate life. I'm an introvert and I work best when I'm left alone, but I don't have a choice in these matters.

✓ I don't like teamwork, but whether I like it or not, it's part of corporate life. I'm an introvert and I work best when I'm left alone, but I don't have a choice in these matters.

Grammar problem type ID 22: Article errors. The phrase 'the corporate life' is unnatural; 'corporate life' without the definite article is idiomatic. Change yields more natural expression.

× I have teamed up with other engineers plenty of times, especially when the task assigned is a little complex.

✓ I have teamed up with other engineers plenty of times, especially when the task assigned is a little complex.

No correction needed under provided grammar problem list. Sentence is grammatically acceptable; 'the task assigned' is understandable though 'a task that was assigned' or 'an assigned task' are alternatives.

× What I like to do is plan so that we can tackle the task in different steps and divide the work accordingly.

✓ What I like to do is plan so that we can tackle the task in different steps and divide the work accordingly.

Grammar problem type ID 8: Verb + -ing form. In cleft constructions with 'What I like to do is ...' either base verb or -ing is possible: 'is plan' is acceptable. No change required; keep 'plan' to match the original meaning.

× I have worked many important decisions and uh, life skills from walking in a team for example.

✓ I have gained many important decision-making skills and life skills from working in a team, for example.

Grammar problem type ID 5: Past tense issue. The original uses 'have worked' incorrectly with 'decisions' and 'walking in a team'. 'Gained' (present perfect) or 'have gained' fits with 'from working in a team'. Also noun forms: 'decision-making skills' and 'working in a team' are correct collocations. Change clarifies meaning and corrects tense and word choice.

× I learned how to accept others working style and how to work with people who are difficult.

✓ I learned how to accept others' working styles and how to work with people who are difficult.

Grammar problem type ID 13: Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs. Actually this is a possessive and plural issue: add possessive apostrophe and plural 'styles' to match 'others'. Also 'learned' is fine (past). Suggestion: use 'others' working styles' to show possession and plurality.

× I think teamwork is a great exercise to work with other people, but sometimes the work gets overshadowed by a few people who are more vocal about their work than others, and I think that's a specific disadvantage in my case too.

✓ I think teamwork is a great way to work with other people, but sometimes the work gets overshadowed by a few people who are more vocal than others, and I think that's a disadvantage in my case too.

Grammar problem type ID 11: Incorrect use of prepositions and 13: Incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs. 'A great exercise to work with other people' is awkward; use 'a great way to work with other people'. 'More vocal about their work than others' is wordy—'more vocal than others' is clearer. Removed redundant 'specific' as unnecessary. Combined fixes improve naturalness.