Teamwork— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clear and natural: start with a direct topic sentence, avoid irrelevant or incorrect words (e.g. “Timbuktu”), reduce fillers, and keep sentences concise (max 5). Add one or two specific supporting reasons using linking words such as because or so. Pronunciation and grammar need small fixes (e.g. “the work done alone”).

예시: Yes, I do like teamwork. I enjoy working with colleagues because combining different skills usually produces better results, so projects are completed more creatively and efficiently.

제안: Good content and specificity. Make the answer more concise and use linking words to organize events (first, then, finally). Correct minor grammar (remove repeated "before"). Keep under five sentences and add one clear result or your role to strengthen the answer.

예시: Yes, I teamed up with colleagues to organize a project of traditional Chinese games for children. First, we looked for funders, then we designed the activities, and finally I helped coordinate the schedules to make sure everything ran smoothly.

제안: Begin with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question. Avoid confusion and incorrect negatives ("mistakes can't be occurred"). Use linking words (for example, therefore) and give a specific example of a skill learned (e.g. listening, clarifying tasks). Keep sentences grammatically correct and concise.

예시: I have learned that good communication is essential in a team. For example, by asking questions and confirming tasks, we can avoid misunderstandings and reduce mistakes, which helps the project finish on time.

제안: Answer directly, reduce repetition, and use linking words like because and so to explain reasons clearly. Correct grammar (e.g. "the coordinators give many comments, so it takes time to reach a decision"). Optionally offer a brief example or a way you cope with this issue to show reflection.

예시: Sometimes I dislike teamwork because it can be inefficient: coordinators may give many different suggestions, so it often takes a long time to reach a decision. To manage this, I try to summarise options and suggest a compromise.

× Uh, I definitely like Timbuktu. It's a team spirited person.

✓ Uh, I definitely like teamwork. It's a team-spirited activity.

The student used 'Timbuktu' (a place) instead of 'teamwork' and then referred to 'person' incorrectly. This is an adjective/noun choice error. Use 'teamwork' (noun) and 'team-spirited' (compound adjective) to describe the activity; 'person' is not appropriate after 'team-spirited' when referring to the concept of teamwork. Suggestion: replace incorrect nouns and form compound adjective with a hyphen when modifying a noun.

× I love uh, getting work done with my teammates or colleagues.

✓ I love getting work done with my teammates or my colleagues.

The sentence is mostly correct but adding 'my' before 'colleagues' improves specificity and parallelism. Article errors here relate to missing possessive determiners. Suggestion: maintain consistent determiners for coordinated nouns.

× I believe the outcome of uh, teamwork will outshine the work that did alone.

✓ I believe the outcome of teamwork will outshine the work done alone.

The clause 'the work that did alone' is ungrammatical because the subject performing 'did' is missing. This is a sentence structure error. Use passive or past participle 'done' to indicate work performed alone. Suggestion: use 'work done alone' or 'the work I did alone' for clarity.

× I once teamed up with my colleagues at work before we were preparing a project for children to play different games about Chinese culture, and we cooperated to find funders and planned the activities together.

✓ I once teamed up with my colleagues at work when we prepared a project for children to play different games about Chinese culture, and we cooperated to find funders and planned the activities together.

The original mixes past continuous ('were preparing') with 'once' awkwardly; simple past 'prepared' fits better to describe a completed project. This is a past tense choice issue. Suggestion: use simple past for completed events: 'when we prepared' or 'to prepare' depending on intended meaning.

× Are they? Collaborating with teammates highlights the importance of communication.

✓ Collaborating with teammates highlights the importance of communication.

'Are they?' is an extraneous question fragment that does not belong and disrupts the sentence structure. Remove it to maintain a clear declarative statement. Suggestion: avoid unrelated interjections that break sentence flow.

× Uh, if I cannot communicate well with my teammates, mistakes can't be occurred due to the misunderstanding with each other.

✓ If I cannot communicate well with my teammates, mistakes can occur due to misunderstandings among us.

'Can't be occurred' is ungrammatical modal/passive misuse. Use active 'can occur' to express possibility. Also use plural 'misunderstandings' and 'among us' or 'between us' instead of 'with each other.' Suggestion: use correct modal + base verb form ('can occur') and revise noun forms and prepositions.

× Sometimes I dislike teamwork because it can be inefficient and coordinators can provide many comments or thoughts and which it takes time to get to the conclusion which everyone agrees.

✓ Sometimes I dislike teamwork because it can be inefficient: coordinators may provide many comments or ideas, and it takes time to reach a conclusion that everyone agrees on.

Multiple problems: pronoun 'which it' is incorrect and overall relative clause structure is wrong. Replace 'which it takes time' with 'it takes time' and 'which everyone agrees' with 'that everyone agrees on.' Also 'comments or thoughts' is better as 'comments or ideas' and 'can provide' -> 'may provide' to indicate possibility. This falls under incorrect use of pronouns and sentence structure. Suggestion: restructure into two clauses and use correct relative pronoun 'that' and preposition 'on'.