Dreams— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は直接的で内容も明確ですが、文法的な自然さと語彙の多様性を向上させる余地があります。例えば、「the dream which I had」よりも「a dream I had」や「one of my dreams」などの表現を使うと自然です。また、「researcher about biology」より「biological researcher」や「researcher in biology」の方が適切です。

예시: Yes, I can remember a dream I had when I was in junior high school. At that time, I wanted to become a biological researcher to better understand plants and insects.

제안: 回答は意味が伝わりますが、文のつながりや語彙の選択に改善の余地があります。「helps me to achieve our goals」より「helps me achieve my goals」や「helps us achieve our goals」の方が自然です。また、例の部分も具体的に説明すると良いでしょう。

예시: Yes, I often share my dreams with my university classmates because it helps me achieve my goals. For example, when I tell them about my dreams, they sometimes offer useful advice or support.

제안: 内容は理解できますが、文法と表現の自然さに課題があります。「dreams helped us make a lot of efforts」は不自然で、「dreams motivate us to work hard」などの表現が適切です。また、時制の一致にも注意しましょう。

예시: Yes, I strongly believe that dreams have special meanings because they motivate us to work hard. For example, I spend a lot of time studying to become a researcher in the future.

제안: 回答は明確ですが、より自然で流暢な表現に改善できます。「I strongly think that in the future I would like to achieve my dreams」より「I strongly want to achieve my dreams in the future」や「I am determined to make my dreams come true」などが良いでしょう。また、例も具体的にすると良いです。

예시: Yes, I am determined to make my dreams come true in the future because achieving my goals will allow me to live a better life. For example, I will be able to afford the things I want to buy and enjoy good food.

× I can remember the dream which I had when I was a junior high school student.

✓ I can remember the dreams which I had when I was a junior high school student.

The student refers to multiple dreams in general, so the plural form 'dreams' is more appropriate than the singular 'dream'.

× I wanted to be a researcher about biology in order to understand plants and insects.

✓ I wanted to be a researcher in biology in order to understand plants and insects.

The correct preposition to use with 'researcher' and a field of study is 'in', not 'about'. 'Researcher in biology' is the proper phrase.

× I often share my dreams with my classmates in university because sharing dreams helps me to achieve our goals.

✓ I often share my dreams with my classmates in university because sharing dreams helps me to achieve my goals.

The pronoun 'our' is inconsistent with the subject 'me'. It should be 'my goals' to match the singular first person subject.

× I strongly believe that dreams have special meaning because dreams helped us make a lot of efforts.

✓ I strongly believe that dreams have special meanings because dreams helped us make a lot of efforts.

The noun 'meaning' should be plural 'meanings' when referring to multiple dreams. Also, 'make a lot of efforts' is awkward; however, since only grammar issues in the list are corrected, 'make a lot of efforts' is left as is.

× dreams helped us make a lot of efforts.

✓ dreams helped me make a lot of efforts.

The pronoun 'us' is inconsistent with the singular first person perspective of the student. It should be 'me' to match the singular subject.

× I spend a lot of time studying in order to be a researcher in the future.

✓ I spend a lot of time studying in order to become a researcher in the future.

The verb 'be' should be replaced with 'become' to correctly express the intention of achieving a future status.

× I strongly think that in the future I would like to achieve my dreams, because by achieving my goals I will be able to lead a better life.

✓ I strongly think that in the future I would like to achieve my dreams because by achieving my goals I will be able to lead a better life.

The comma before 'because' is unnecessary and should be removed to improve sentence flow.

× I will be able to get what I want to buy and eat.

✓ I will be able to get what I want to buy and eat.

This sentence is grammatically correct and requires no correction.