Dreams— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 文法の誤りと不自然な表現を改善しましょう。例えば、過去の夢について話す際は時制を正しく使い、文を簡潔にまとめることが重要です。

예시: Yes, I remember a dream I had when I was a child. I wanted to become a teacher because my elementary school teacher was very inspiring.

제안: 意味が伝わりにくい部分があるため、感情や理由を明確に表現し、文法を正しく使いましょう。

예시: I usually don't share my dreams because I feel a bit embarrassed. However, I am very interested in other people's dreams because they seem fascinating to me.

제안: 文の構造が不自然で意味が曖昧なので、理由を明確にし、論理的に話を展開しましょう。

예시: Yes, I believe dreams have special meanings. They can motivate us to work hard and achieve our goals.

제안: 現在の状況と未来の意志を明確に区別し、自然な表現を使いましょう。

예시: I don't have a specific dream at the moment, but if I do, I would definitely try my best to make it come true.

× Yes, I have a dream when I was a child that is teacher.

✓ Yes, I had a dream when I was a child to be a teacher.

The sentence incorrectly uses the present tense 'have' to describe a past event. The verb should be in the past tense 'had' to match the time frame indicated by 'when I was a child'.

× Yes, I have a dream when I was a child that is teacher.

✓ Yes, I had a dream when I was a child to be a teacher.

The phrase 'that is teacher' is unclear and incorrect. It should be rephrased to 'to be a teacher' to correctly express the intended meaning of the dream's content.

× I'm very interested in others dream because it's so strange for me to be someone.

✓ I'm very interested in others' dreams because it's so strange for me to be someone.

The word 'others' should be possessive 'others'' and 'dream' should be plural 'dreams' to correctly indicate dreams belonging to other people.

× I'm very interested in others dream because it's so strange for me to be someone.

✓ I'm very interested in others' dreams because it's so strange for me to be someone.

The sentence lacks the possessive apostrophe in 'others' to show ownership of the dreams.

× Yes, I think dreams have special meanings and it's so helpful for you to fulfill the dreams because you can.

✓ Yes, I think dreams have special meanings and it's very helpful for you to fulfill them because you can.

The phrase 'fulfill the dreams because you can' is awkward and unclear. Replacing 'the dreams' with 'them' and restructuring the sentence improves clarity and flow.

× You can make an effort by thinking your dreams.

✓ You can make an effort by thinking about your dreams.

The verb 'thinking' requires the preposition 'about' to correctly link it to the object 'your dreams'.