Dreams— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: この回答は意味は伝わりますが、文法の誤りや冗長な表現があり、より自然で簡潔な表現に改善できます。例えば、"I do not remember the dreams I dreamed in the night"は"I don't usually remember my dreams at night"の方が自然です。また、"always told about them to my parents"は"always told my parents about them"が正しい語順です。

예시: I don't usually remember my dreams at night. However, when I was younger, I often had scary dreams and used to tell my parents about them.

제안: この回答は意味が不明瞭で、文法や語彙の誤用が多く、内容が伝わりにくいです。質問に直接答え、簡潔で明確な表現を使うことが重要です。例えば、"I'm very interested in other things"は質問の内容とずれており、"I'm very interested in other people's dreams"のように具体的に答えましょう。

예시: Yes, I'm very interested in other people's dreams because I find them fascinating and inspiring. I often ask my friends about their dreams to understand their thoughts better.

제안: この回答は意味がほとんど理解できず、文法や語彙の誤用が多すぎます。質問に対してシンプルで明確な意見を述べ、具体的な理由や例を加えることが必要です。

예시: I think dreams can have special meanings because they might reflect our thoughts and feelings that we are not aware of during the day.

제안: この回答は意図は伝わりますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現があります。例えば、"Absolutely this"は不自然で、"Absolutely, I do"や"Definitely"の方が良いです。また、"That's my team right now"は意味が不明瞭で、"That's my dream right now"が正しいです。

예시: Absolutely, I want to make my dreams come true. That's why I have been working hard day and night, even when I feel tired, to study for a master's degree in civil engineering. This is my current goal.

× I do not remember the dreams I dreamed in the night.

✓ I do not remember the dreams I had at night.

The verb 'dreamed' is grammatically correct in past tense, but 'had' is more natural and commonly used when referring to dreams experienced during sleep. Using 'had' improves fluency and clarity.

× always told about them to my parents

✓ always told my parents about them

The correct word order is 'tell someone about something.' Placing 'about them' before 'to my parents' is incorrect. The preposition 'to' should directly follow the verb when indicating the person being told.

× I kept myself in getting on short streams throughout their talk.

✓ I keep myself from interrupting during their talk.

The original sentence uses past tense 'kept' inconsistently with the present context. Also, 'getting on short streams' is unclear and incorrect. The phrase 'keep myself from interrupting' correctly expresses the intended meaning in present tense.

× I somehow connect them and connect to them and feel my curiosity.

✓ I somehow connect with them and feel my curiosity.

The verb 'connect' is commonly followed by the preposition 'with' when referring to forming a relationship or understanding. Repeating 'connect' twice is redundant; simplifying improves clarity.

× I believe in the dreams of the deflection of our submarines brain that we have been ignoring throughout the.

✓ I believe that dreams reflect our subconscious mind, which we have been ignoring all along.

The original sentence is unclear and structurally incorrect. 'Deflection of our submarines brain' is nonsensical. Rewriting the sentence to express the intended meaning with proper structure and vocabulary is necessary.

× The time I think by the means of dreams something is something is spiritual or something so conscious is.

✓ I think that through dreams, something spiritual or conscious is revealed.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Simplifying and restructuring the sentence clarifies the intended meaning about dreams revealing spiritual or conscious elements.

× Absolutely this.

✓ Absolutely.

'Absolutely this' is incorrect because 'this' is unnecessary and does not fit the context. Using 'Absolutely' alone is sufficient to express agreement.

× I want to make my dream come true.

✓ I want to make my dreams come true.

Since the context refers to multiple aspirations, the plural 'dreams' is more appropriate than the singular 'dream.'

× So I've been working day and night without any hesitation and feeling tired so that I could study the master degree in civil engineering.

✓ So I've been working day and night without any hesitation and feeling tired so that I can study for a master's degree in civil engineering.

The phrase 'could study' suggests past ability, but the context implies current or future intention, so 'can study' is correct. Also, 'master degree' should be 'master's degree' to be grammatically correct.

× That's my team right now.

✓ That's my dream right now.

'Team' is incorrect in this context; the intended word is 'dream.' This is a vocabulary error rather than a grammar problem, but correcting it improves clarity.