Dreams— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and clear: avoid awkward or incorrect phrases (e.g. "quietly pleading"), remove filler words, fix grammar (singular/plural), and keep it concise (max 3–4 sentences). Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail using a linking word.

예시: Yes, I can remember some of them. Most dreams fade quickly after I wake up, but sometimes I have very vivid dreams that stay with me all day, especially when they are strange or emotional.

제안: Correct word choice and clarity are needed. Replace incorrect or odd words (e.g. "degree was incredibly pizzeria") and avoid mixing metaphors. Give a brief reason using a linking word and a specific example of whom you share with.

예시: Not usually, unless a dream is extremely funny or bizarre. I find long dream descriptions boring for most people, so I only tell a few close friends or family when a dream is worth sharing.

제안: Improve grammar and fluency: remove repetition and fillers, correct structures (e.g. "I'm skeptical"), and use a linking phrase to explain your view with a concise reason or example. Keep it natural and coherent.

예시: I'm quite skeptical about that. Although some people think dreams reveal the subconscious, I believe they are mainly the brain processing daily experiences and emotions, for example replaying a stressful conversation from the day.

제안: This answer is clear and relevant; to improve further, be slightly more concise and add a specific example of a goal using a linking word.

예시: Yes, if you mean life aspirations. I'm working hard towards my professional goals, for instance getting a promotion this year, because I think achieving them would be very fulfilling.

× However, occasionally I have a very vivid dreams that stay with me for the rest of the day, especially if they were particularly strange.

✓ However, occasionally I have a very vivid dream that stays with me for the rest of the day, especially if it is particularly strange.

The noun 'dreams' should be singular because 'a very vivid' requires a singular noun (Grammar problem type: singular and plural/article). Also the verb must agree with the singular subject: 'dream that stays' not 'dreams that stay'. 'They were' mixes plural verb and past tense; use 'it is' or 'it is particularly' to keep present relevance. Suggestion: match article+noun number and ensure subject-verb agreement by using 'a dream' with 'stays'.

× Not typically, unless the degree was incredibly pizzeria or hilarious.

✓ Not typically, unless the story was incredibly bizarre or hilarious.

'Degree' and 'pizzeria' are incorrect words here, likely typos. The intended meaning is 'story' or 'dream' and 'bizarre' as the adjective. Use 'the story was' or 'the dream was' with correct adjective. Also keep past or present tense consistent with context. Suggestion: replace incorrect words with appropriate vocabulary ('story/dream' and 'bizarre').

× I found that recording dreams can sometimes be a bit tedious for the listener, so I only share them with my inner circle of friends or family.

✓ I find that recording dreams can sometimes be a bit tedious for the listener, so I only share them with my inner circle of friends or family.

Context is general present tendency, so present simple 'I find' is better than past 'I found'. The original mixes past with a general statement. Suggestion: use present tense for habitual truths and keep tense consistent within the sentence.

× I'm a big skeptical about that Why many believe dreams reflect reflect our subconscious deserves umm.

✓ I'm very skeptical about that. While many believe dreams reflect our subconscious, I don't think that's necessarily true.

'a big skeptical' is ungrammatical; use 'very skeptical' or 'a big skeptic'. The sentence also lacks proper punctuation and uses repeated 'reflect'. 'Why ... deserves umm' is unclear; replace with a clear clause 'While many believe...'. Suggestion: use correct adjective/adverb forms ('very skeptical') and clear conjunctions ('while') to contrast ideas. Remove filler words and repetitions.

× I personally view them as just a way for the brain to process information and emotions from our daily life live.

✓ I personally view them as a way for the brain to process information and emotions from our daily life.

Remove redundant words: 'just' is optional and 'life live' repeats 'life'. Use 'a way' instead of 'just a way' if concise. Ensure no duplicated words. Suggestion: proofread to remove repeated words and keep phrasing concise.

× If you are referring to my life aspirations, then absolutely.

✓ If you are referring to my life aspirations, then absolutely I do.

The original fragment is acceptable conversationally but adding 'I do' clarifies the response to 'Do you want to make your dreams come true?'. The sentence requires a clear subject to match the question. Suggestion: complete the elliptical response when needed for clarity.

× I'm working hard to achieve my professional goals because I believe that seeing my long term efforts pay off would be immensely fulfilling.

✓ I'm working hard to achieve my professional goals because I believe that seeing my long-term efforts pay off will be immensely fulfilling.

Use hyphenated 'long-term' as a compound adjective. The modal 'would be' implies conditional; since the speaker believes it is likely, 'will be' fits better. Keep tense consistent: present continuous 'I'm working' with future result 'will be'. Suggestion: use correct compound adjective punctuation and choose a modal that matches the speaker's certainty.