Emails— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は自然ですが、文法の誤り（"In 20 years ago"は不自然）を修正し、より簡潔に答えることが望ましいです。また、冗長な表現を避け、文を5文以内にまとめることを意識しましょう。

예시: No, I don't often send emails because I usually use chatting tools like Microsoft Teams. Twenty years ago, I used emails to arrange my schedule, but now I rarely use them.

제안: 多くの"uh"や"umm"が含まれており、流暢さを損なっています。回答は簡潔で明確にし、接続詞を使って論理的に説明しましょう。

예시: I send emails when I need to keep a record of conversations. This is important because if I encounter any problems, I can show the emails to my business department to prevent misunderstandings.

제안: 文法の誤り（"a very popular"や"use emails instead"）を修正し、より自然な表現を使いましょう。また、接続詞を用いて文の流れを良くしてください。

예시: No, I don't think emails are popular in China anymore. Ten years ago, many young people used emails, but recently, those under 20 prefer communication apps like Microsoft Teams because they are more convenient.

제안: 文法の誤り（"are with be punished"など）を修正し、意味が明確になるように表現を改善しましょう。接続詞を使い、理由を明確に述べることが重要です。

예시: I think sending and receiving emails will become less popular in the near future because platforms like Teams are very useful. Also, big tech companies like Google and Apple are developing new communication tools.

× In 20 years ago I always used e-mail to arrange my schedule, but nowadays I don't use it.

✓ 20 years ago, I always used e-mail to arrange my schedule, but nowadays I don't use it.

The phrase 'In 20 years ago' is incorrect. When referring to a specific time in the past, 'ago' should be used without 'in'. The correct form is '20 years ago'.

× I always use the emails when I have to record the conversation.

✓ I always use emails when I have to record the conversation.

The definite article 'the' is unnecessary before 'emails' in this context because it refers to emails in general, not specific ones. Removing 'the' makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× No, I don't think so. 10 years ago e-mail was a very popular among young people, but recently many young people under 20 don't use emails instead and they always use a communication.

✓ No, I don't think so. 10 years ago, e-mail was very popular among young people, but recently many young people under 20 don't use emails and always use communication apps like Microsoft Teams and other platforms, which are much more useful than emails for conversation.

The phrase 'a very popular' is incorrect because 'popular' is an adjective that does not require an article here. Also, 'a communication' is incorrect; it should be 'communication apps' or 'communication platforms'. The sentence was restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× ...and they always use a communication.

✓ ...and they always use communication apps.

'A communication' is incorrect because 'communication' is an uncountable noun here. It should be 'communication apps' or 'communication platforms' to specify the tools used.

× It seems that the habits of sending and receiving e-mail are with be punished in the near future because there are some platforms such as Teams are very useful and giant tech such as Google and Apple tries to develop a new version.

✓ It seems that the habits of sending and receiving e-mail will be diminished in the near future because platforms such as Teams are very useful, and giant tech companies like Google and Apple are trying to develop new versions.

The phrase 'are with be punished' is incorrect and unclear. The intended meaning is likely that these habits will decline or be replaced. Also, the sentence had subject-verb agreement errors ('giant tech... tries' should be 'giant tech companies... are trying') and awkward phrasing. The sentence was corrected for clarity, grammar, and proper verb tense.