Emails— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答时有重复和语法错误，表达不够简洁自然。建议减少重复，注意语法，使用更自然的表达方式，并且用连接词使句子更连贯。

예시: Yes, I often send emails as part of my daily routine. I use email to communicate with my colleagues about work, such as discussing project progress and requesting assistance when needed.

제안: 回答内容较完整，但表达略显重复且不够流畅。建议使用连接词优化句子结构，避免重复表达，并注意时态和语法的准确性。

예시: I usually send emails during working hours, from 9:00 AM to 6:00 PM, because that is when I handle work-related matters. After work, I generally don't check my emails.

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，内容重复且缺乏具体细节。建议简化句子结构，使用更准确的词汇，并提供更具体的例子。

예시: Yes, sending emails is very popular in China, especially among employees. They use emails to assign tasks, discuss plans, and coordinate work efficiently.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和表达不完整，且结尾含糊。建议注意句子完整性，避免语法错误，并用更清晰的语言表达观点。

예시: I believe sending emails will become more popular in the future because with rapid technological development, people increasingly rely on electronic communication tools for work.

× Sending e-mail is my everyday routine because I I use e-mail to communicate with my colleagues on work and we need to negotiate all the details on e-mail.

✓ Sending e-mail is my everyday routine because I use e-mail to communicate with my colleagues at work and we need to negotiate all the details by e-mail.

句中"on work"应改为"at work"，因为表示在某个地点或环境时，通常用介词"at"，而不是"on"。此外，"on e-mail"应改为"by e-mail"，表示通过电子邮件进行沟通。

× For example, how was the project going and what's your proportions and what do you need for help?

✓ For example, how is the project going, what are your proportions, and what help do you need?

句中"was"应改为"is"，因为描述当前情况应使用一般现在时。"what's your proportions"应改为"what are your proportions"，主语为复数，谓语动词应使用复数形式。"what do you need for help"应改为"what help do you need"，表达更自然。

× We we communicate all the details on it.

✓ We communicate all the details on it.

句中重复了"we"，应删除多余的词。

× Usually I send emails on the working hours which is from 9:00 AM to 6:00 PM because this is my working time and basically I will send e-mail during this period because you need to negotiate all the details on your work.

✓ Usually I send emails during working hours, which are from 9:00 AM to 6:00 PM, because this is my working time and basically I will send e-mails during this period because you need to negotiate all the details of your work.

"on the working hours"应改为"during working hours"，表示在某段时间内。"which is"应改为"which are"，因为"working hours"是复数。"on your work"应改为"of your work"，表示关于工作的细节。

× But after the working time you don't have to pay attention to the e-mail anymore.

✓ But after working hours, you don't need to pay attention to the e-mails anymore.

"don't have to"表示没有义务，语气较强，"don't need to"更合适表达不必做某事。"the working time"改为"working hours"更自然。

× Yes, absolutely, especially for the employees because they need e-mail to put all their work forward, for example, what they need their colleagues to do to help them and what's the next plan and what do you need for your job.

✓ Yes, absolutely, especially for employees because they need e-mails to put all their work forward, for example, what they need their colleagues to do to help them, what the next plan is, and what they need for their job.

"the employees"改为"employees"更自然。"e-mail"应使用复数"e-mails"，因为指多封邮件。"what's the next plan"应改为"what the next plan is"，保持句子结构一致。"what do you need"应改为"what they need"，保持主语一致。

× And all this is essential for us to communicate with.

✓ And all this is essential for us to communicate.

"communicate with"后面应接具体对象，此处无对象，故去掉"with"。

× It's hard to tell, but I think the answer is probably more popular in the future because nowadays the with the rapid development of the high tech technology people are more and more relied on the E communication tools to work with others.

✓ It's hard to tell, but I think the answer is that it will probably be more popular in the future because nowadays, with the rapid development of high-tech technology, people rely more and more on e-communication tools to work with others.

"the with the"重复，应删去一个"the"。"people are more and more relied on"应改为"people rely more and more on"，因为"rely"是主动动词，不能用被动形式。"the high tech technology"应改为"high-tech technology"，去掉多余冠词。

× So yes, it's it is more computer.

✓ So yes, it is more computerized.

"more computer"用词错误，应使用形容词"computerized"表示"更加计算机化"。