Emails— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce hesitations and repetitions, start with a clear topic sentence, and provide one or two specific supporting details with logical linking words. Also correct minor grammar (e.g., 'on a daily basis', 'incomplete tasks', 'feedback'). Aim for 2–4 fluent sentences.

예시: Yes, I send emails regularly because I work in a corporate role. For example, I email colleagues and vendors every day to follow up on incomplete tasks and to request feedback, so email is essential for coordinating our work.

제안: Avoid repeating the same point twice. Begin with a direct answer then add a specific reason or example using a linking word like 'because' or 'so'. Fix grammar: 'on a daily basis', 'cross-functional teams'. Keep it concise.

예시: I send emails every day because most of my tasks require follow-up and support from cross-functional teams. For instance, I often email vendors to check delivery schedules and colleagues to confirm task progress.

제안: Be confident and concise. If unsure, say so briefly then give a reasonable, specific assumption with a linking phrase (e.g., 'however' or 'but'). Avoid filler words and repetition. Use 'well-developed' or 'advanced' instead of 'developed in terms of technology.'

예시: I don't know much about China personally, but I would assume email is popular there because the country has advanced technology and widespread internet use. However, people might also use messaging apps frequently for casual communication.

제안: This answer is on the right track. Make it smoother by removing fillers and combining ideas with clear linking words like 'whereas' or 'however'. Use plural/singular consistently: 'academic purposes'. Provide a brief example to support the prediction.

예시: I think casual communication will increasingly move to smartphones and messaging apps, whereas emails will remain important for official and academic purposes. For example, students may message classmates informally but still submit assignments and formal requests by email.

× I, I have to send uh, emails on daily basis to my colleagues and my vendors to follow up on in incomplete tasks, how to get their feedbacks.

✓ I have to send emails on a daily basis to my colleagues and my vendors to follow up on incomplete tasks and to get their feedback.

Errors: unnecessary fillers removed; 'on daily basis' lacks an article -> 'on a daily basis' (Article errors, ID 22) and counts as fixed under present participle context for 'follow up on incomplete tasks and to get their feedback'. 'in incomplete tasks' incorrect preposition and extra 'in' removed (Incorrect use of prepositions, ID 11). 'feedbacks' is uncountable -> 'feedback' (Singular and plural issue, ID 1). Suggestion: Use 'on a daily basis', remove extra words, use 'follow up on' + noun phrase, and use uncountable 'feedback'.

× I send emails to my colleagues and my vendors on on daily basis.

✓ I send emails to my colleagues and my vendors on a daily basis.

Error: missing article before 'daily basis' -> should be 'a daily basis'. Also duplicate 'on on' should be 'on'. Suggestion: Use 'on a daily basis' for frequency and avoid repeated words.

× most of my work, uh, depends on, uh, following up, uh, from my colleagues

✓ most of my work depends on following up with my colleagues

Error: wrong preposition after 'following up' — use 'with' or 'on' depending on context; here 'following up with my colleagues' is correct. Also remove unnecessary commas and fillers. Suggestion: Use 'follow up with' when contacting people.

× I assume that yes, they, the emails are very popular in China.

✓ I assume that yes, emails are very popular in China.

Error: redundant and incorrect pronoun placement 'they, the emails' — 'they' and 'the emails' conflict. Remove 'they' and optionally article. Suggestion: Say 'emails are very popular in China' or 'they are very popular' but not both together.

× for official purposes and academic purpose, e-mail will also be, uh, important.

✓ for official and academic purposes, email will also be important.

Errors: inconsistency in plural 'purposes' and singular 'purpose' -> use plural for both; use 'email' (no hyphen preferred) and remove filler commas. Suggestion: Match noun forms and keep parallel structure: 'official and academic purposes'.