Emails— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and pronouns, and finish your thought. Use one or two supporting details with linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., 'send' used many times) and incomplete sentences.

예시: Yes, I often send emails at work. For example, I email my boss to arrange meetings and to send confidential documents that shouldn’t be shared publicly. I also write to colleagues to coordinate tasks and share updates.

제안: Use correct tense and simpler, clearer structure. Give a topic sentence, then specific reasons with linking words (because, so, therefore). Correct common errors: 'more easier' → 'easier', 'documentations' → 'documents', 'communications ways' → 'means of communication'. Keep within 3–4 sentences.

예시: I usually send emails only when I’m at work because email is a reliable way to keep a written record of important documents. For example, I email meeting minutes and project files so everyone has a clear reference. Therefore, email is our preferred method for formal communication.

제안: Answer directly and add a clear reason with a complete example. Avoid vague phrases like 'I think' repeatedly and finish your sentences. Mention specifics about WeChat features (voice messages, group chats) to strengthen the point.

예시: No, email is less popular for casual communication in China. People mainly use WeChat because it’s faster and supports voice messages, group chats and quick file sharing, so most daily conversations happen there.

제안: Be precise and correct word choice. Remove repetitions ('due to because due to') and use linking words (because, as, therefore). Give a brief comparison with specifics (instant messaging, real-time replies) and a concluding statement about formal vs informal uses.

예시: I believe email will become less popular for everyday chats because instant messaging apps like WhatsApp offer real-time replies and read receipts. However, email will likely remain important for formal or official communication, such as contracts and business records.

× I often send emails at work. For instance, I usually send it to my boss for arranging meetings or sending sensitive or confidential information that could not circulate publicly.

✓ I often send emails at work. For instance, I usually send them to my boss to arrange meetings or to send sensitive or confidential information that should not be circulated publicly.

Used verb + -ing form incorrectly and wrong pronoun number. 'Send it' is incorrect because 'emails' is plural; use 'them'. Use infinitive 'to arrange' and 'to send' instead of gerund phrases here for clear purpose. Also use 'should not be circulated' for correct modal/passive meaning rather than 'could not circulate'.

× Also, I would send e-mail to my colleagues on the.

✓ Also, I would send e-mails to my colleagues.

Sentence is incomplete and has extra preposition 'on the' without an object. Remove the fragment and pluralize 'e-mail' to 'e-mails' to match general use. Ensure a complete object follows any preposition.

× I sent emails to others when I was at work only because I think it's more easier to contact and talk to them through e-mail because at work we need to make sure all documentations were being documented in the e-mail.

✓ I send emails to others at work mainly because I think it's easier to contact and talk to them by e-mail; at work we need to make sure all documentation is recorded in e-mails.

Tense was inconsistent: 'I sent' (past) conflicts with present reasoning 'I think'. Change to present 'I send'. 'More easier' is incorrect comparative (double comparative); use 'easier'. 'Documentations' is uncountable; use 'documentation'. Passive 'were being documented' is awkward; use active or simple passive 'is recorded'. Match plurality: 'e-mails'.

× So I think it's the best communications ways for us.

✓ So I think it's the best way of communicating for us.

Incorrect quantifier and noun form: 'communications ways' is ungrammatical. Use singular 'way' or phrase 'best way of communicating' to express method. Alternatively, 'the best communication method' is correct.

× I think sending the emails is not quite popular in China.

✓ I think sending emails is not very popular in China.

Article 'the' is unnecessary before 'emails' in a general statement. Also 'not quite popular' is better expressed as 'not very popular' for clarity.

× They used to use WeChat to communicate instead because it's much more convenient and faster.

✓ They use WeChat to communicate instead because it's much more convenient and faster.

'Used to use' implies a past habit; the intention is a general current habit, so use present 'use'. Ensure tense matches present description.

× And also I think communicating in WeChat could record your audio if.

✓ I also think WeChat can record audio messages.

Original sentence is incomplete and awkward. 'Communicating in WeChat could record your audio if' lacks a condition. Simplify to 'WeChat can record audio messages' to convey the idea clearly and grammatically.

× I think sending emails would be less popular in the future due to because due to technology advancement.

✓ I think sending emails will be less popular in the future because of technological advancement.

Redundant 'due to because due to' is incorrect. Use 'because of' or 'due to' but not both. 'Would be' suggests conditional; 'will be' is better for predicting the future. 'Technology advancement' should be 'technological advancement'.

× People prefer to use WhatsApp online to communicate with each other, which is more reeling time than using emails because normal.

✓ People prefer to use WhatsApp to communicate because it is more real-time than e-mail.

'Reeling time' is a misspelling of 'real-time'. 'Online' is unnecessary here. The comparative structure should compare 'more real-time than e-mail' (e-mail singular or 'emails') and remove the fragment 'because normal'. Simplify for clarity.